Every Moment Counts

June 21, 2010
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Speed,speed,speed the speedometer inching forward,
going faster by the minute.
Being carefree teenagers
living the life just in the moment.
Free and enjoying the summer air
not thinking,singing along with the radio with friends.
One Moment changes everything,
from a great time to a terror ride.

Speed,speed,speed the speedometer inching forward,
going faster by the minute.
Making a sharp turn to avoid a deer,
to lose control over the vehicle.
Everything happening so fast at once,
the car flips three times.

Smashing into the dash,and the side door,
feeling the warmness of blood.
Watch as an older brother tries to protect his younger sister:
knowing he is putting himself in danger.
The crash launching him out of the car:
out of the rear window.
Hear him mumble before unconscious:
"I Love You"

Speed,Speed,speed, feeling freedom as I drive faster,
only in a distant dream,look where it got me.
In the hospital;
speed,speed,speed glory of the fast lane,you are a risk.
People are right,
life is a highway which I want to keep riding down.





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TheUnheardVoice said...
May 10, 2012 at 1:01 pm
thank you :)
 
xobriannexo said...
Aug. 30, 2010 at 11:09 am
PHENOMONAL! I loved the different perspective you took as an onlooker to a broad topic and then focusing in on one example, and then changing your perspective at the end to first person. Loved it.
 
TheUnheardVoice replied...
Aug. 30, 2010 at 4:12 pm

Thank You!

I'm so happy you liked it, it was somewhat hard to write a bit,but it just somewhat became easier to write once i started

 
clairexaudrey This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 21, 2010 at 10:10 am
I really like this. I like that you take issues that everyone else kinda slides into the back of their mind, thinking they'll never have to face it or talk about it. You confront them and you tell people "this is what happens; don't be the person to make it come true." Very brave, and very bold. Two characteristics of a great writer.
 
TheUnheardVoice replied...
Aug. 21, 2010 at 4:48 pm
Thank you i'm glad you enjoyed reading my writing,and i actually know somebody who had to go through an experience like this, she wasn't there,but it was someone she loved,and they were in the car, and she told me and i was able to write this free verse and it is one of those things people don't want to think about when they are on the road, or in the summer,but there is always a chance that it could happen.
 
crubs3 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 19, 2010 at 5:45 pm
I love this! its so brave of you to write about something that no one wants to face. if you could please comment and rate my work that would be great!! especially to anonymous!!!! thanx and ur really good!!!!
 
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