Falling Down

June 17, 2010
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she is falling,





he is falling,
falling to the ground.



falling to the ground.
sweetly, softly,





loudly, rudely,
you would hardly notice her.

you would have to notice him.
her hair falls,





his hair streams,
around her face,




back from his face,
like locks of gold,




like locks of mud,
you would be blinded.



you would be disgusted.
she is falling,






he is falling,
falling sweetly.





falling loudly.
the ground caves in,



the ground caves in,
and swallows her up,



and swallows him up,
that thin body





that thick body
of her who was falling.


of him who was falling.






they are not falling.







they are safe,






safe in the ground.





though total opposites,






together they are,






no longer falling.





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crubs3 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 15, 2010 at 12:24 am
This is really good!! i can feel the emotion!!! if you could please rate and comment my work that would be great!! thanks and u r really good dont stop!!!
 
GzusFreak10 replied...
Jul. 18, 2010 at 3:15 pm
This is terriffic! I got a little bit confused, but i like it. I think i sorted it out. If u could read and comment on my new work, How to Host a Murder Without Even Trying, that would b swell. It's 5 parts, and it's my first mystery, so idk how good it is. Thanks!
 
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