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We Dance

We’re all just sitting
Shifting uncomfortably
Waiting.
Then comes a loud crash
And it all comes down at once.
I start running out side so fast
You’d think it was diamonds that were falling,
Not simple liquid.
Steam rises from the sidewalk
from the cool rain
And the warm day.
Meeting on the pavement
Like a greeting.
And I start dancing.
The wet grass
Now sparkling like jewels,
Tickles my bare feet.
And I can’t think of anything
More amazing.




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iDogrocker said...
Jul. 22, 2010 at 5:35 pm:
Short and sweet. You did a great job of creating an image in the reader's mind. I love to see that :)
 
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gymbabe This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 17, 2010 at 6:58 pm:
This was beautiful, short, simple, and well-worded, your emotions came through very clearly.
 
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smart_blondeThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 17, 2010 at 6:40 pm:
This poem is so simple, yet it says so much. that is what peotry is all about, saying more with less. I think that this was a great concept.
 
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mudpuppy said...
Jul. 17, 2010 at 6:23 pm:
The sweet moments of summer. Brilliant. :) I love it!
 
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riley... said...
Jul. 15, 2010 at 2:56 pm:
i loved the ending. like a_dreamer said... it really gets a lot in in only a little bit of poetry... i loved the last two lines. good job
 
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A_Dreamer said...
Jul. 14, 2010 at 6:38 pm:
I like this poem, short and simple. :) This is my favorite poem of the ones you have submitted, good job!
 
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