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Fallen Walls

June 14, 2010
By respecturself7 SILVER, Medina, New York
respecturself7 SILVER, Medina, New York
8 articles 0 photos 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is a natural law in life to settle.....I broke that law ~Katherine Hepburn
Love, Is the severest of mental diseases~U.K.
Spinning always spinning....when life puts me down I'll give you a call~respecturself7


I once was so young a dreamer
Self-absorbed and quite a fool
I danced to silent melodies
And kissed the silvery moon.

My heart once filled with idols
All safe in temple walls
Now rest entombed within my memory
For from their perches did they fall.

Twas' once a merry dreamer
Till my fortune fate did take
The earth around me trembled
The temple walls did quake.

I watched in fear of nature
As each goddess took their fall
And now they lie in pieces
'Neath the fallen temple walls.


The author's comments:
It's really just a picture I painted about people I've put on a pedestal that let me down

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on Jul. 13 2010 at 10:19 am
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

ohh, that was really good dude. u said that beautifully. i liked the line where it said "kissed the silvery moon" too

on Jul. 12 2010 at 6:45 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

This was so expressive and realistic, and I can ABSOLUTELY relate.  I've had the same experience.

on Jul. 12 2010 at 6:04 pm
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
7 articles 0 photos 430 comments

Favorite Quote:
Part of the J7X team. :)

I love your style of writing in this poem! Usually I'm not one who likes things written in that style, but you made it enjoyable to read. :)

I also love your word choice, you did an amazing job describing everything.


on Jul. 12 2010 at 5:39 pm
respecturself7 SILVER, Medina, New York
8 articles 0 photos 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is a natural law in life to settle.....I broke that law ~Katherine Hepburn
Love, Is the severest of mental diseases~U.K.
Spinning always spinning....when life puts me down I'll give you a call~respecturself7

Thanks so much for all ur support!!! I'm really glad u enjoy it. And yes, u were right bout the earthquake thing.

on Jul. 12 2010 at 4:55 pm
Pitiful_Anonymous PLATINUM, New Cumberland, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"and all you f***ers go beep beep beep in cheap,plastic cars. If It's to dumb to see or say you'll still sing it, and I'll just cue the applause" - Marilyn Manson

This is really good. I have to say again that i LOVE the shakespearean style writing, it just makes my heart melt lol :)

You painted the picture very vividly, and as i was reading i could tell exactly what you were saying, and how you felt. It almost seemed as if you were comparing it to an earthquake, that forced your idols off the pedastal.

I like it very much. :)