I Love...Him?

June 7, 2010
By sparkofheart GOLD, Plymouth, Minnesota
sparkofheart GOLD, Plymouth, Minnesota
16 articles 2 photos 254 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Always" - Severus Snape


when I'M
kissing HIM
I wish it was
YOUR arms
wrapped
around MY waist
YOUR fingers
hooked
in MY belt loops
pulling
MY hips
close to YOURS
I wish it was
YOUR lips
moving
so desperately
against MINE
YOUR hair
tangled
in MY fingers
and when MY lips
break
away from HIS
and WE
pull
into a hug
I look over HIS shoulder
wishing
it was YOURS
and a single tear
escapes
from MY eye
cascading
down MY cheek
until it finally
soaks
into the soft fabric
of HIS shirt
I wish
YOU could see
MY tears
and be there
for ME
when I
need YOU most.


The author's comments:
Just a little internal battle going on for me right now

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on Aug. 20 2011 at 11:06 am
sparkofheart GOLD, Plymouth, Minnesota
16 articles 2 photos 254 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Always" - Severus Snape

Thank you so much!! It means a lot to me :) I love hearing everyone's feedback and it really helps me grow as a writer. 

on Jun. 1 2011 at 3:32 pm
SilverLuna SILVER, _________, Washington
8 articles 0 photos 230 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Come fairies take me out of this dull world, for I would ride with you upon the wind and dance upon the mountains like a flame.".... W.B. Yeats.
"Flying is learning how to throw yourself at the ground and miss." - Douglas Adams

I made a promise that I'd check out some of your work way back ago, and now I'm making good on that promise. I hope you forgive me for taking so long. As to the poem, I really liked it. The alternative type what with the capitals for emphasis really add an element both rythmically and tone-wise. Good job!(:

on Oct. 8 2010 at 3:44 pm
sparkofheart GOLD, Plymouth, Minnesota
16 articles 2 photos 254 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Always" - Severus Snape

thanks!! :)

on Oct. 8 2010 at 3:43 pm
sparkofheart GOLD, Plymouth, Minnesota
16 articles 2 photos 254 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Always" - Severus Snape

hey thank you!! that means a lot :)

Melody777 GOLD said...
on Oct. 7 2010 at 10:43 am
Melody777 GOLD, Tonasket, Washington
17 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's not who you are underneath, but what you do that defines you."

this is really relatable for me, you did a good job of expressing all the emotions...

on Sep. 16 2010 at 4:46 pm
Youth.of.the.Nation SILVER, Loveland, Colorado
9 articles 2 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others, and the world, remains and is, immortal." -Albert Pine

AMAZING!!! The way you describe her internal battle with all the capitalization is awesomely fantastic- I loved every minute of it!!!

on Sep. 13 2010 at 10:09 pm
sparkofheart GOLD, Plymouth, Minnesota
16 articles 2 photos 254 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Always" - Severus Snape

hahaha thanks! your enthusiasm totally pumps me up :)

on Sep. 13 2010 at 8:46 pm
apocalyptigirl BRONZE, Staunton, Virginia
4 articles 2 photos 285 comments

Favorite Quote:
"DON'T PANIC." ~from The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy by Douglas Adams

AHHHHH ZOMGZOMGZOMG I LOVE THIS. Everything about it was so cool---the capitalization of the pronouns, the structure, the descriptions of the kiss, the way you conveyed the speaker's emotion--- = favorite at first sight, lol. SERIOUSLY, this is GOOD. Like, AWESOME good. Ok im done now.

on Sep. 13 2010 at 8:28 pm
sparkofheart GOLD, Plymouth, Minnesota
16 articles 2 photos 254 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Always" - Severus Snape

thank youu :)

on Sep. 3 2010 at 6:49 am
LexieMonster SILVER, Spring, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is a learning experience. Push yourself and you will grow." -Rami

This made me think. My past can relate to this so well. :) Love it.




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