I Love...Him?

June 7, 2010
when I'M
kissing HIM
I wish it was
YOUR arms
around MY waist
YOUR fingers
in MY belt loops
MY hips
close to YOURS
I wish it was
YOUR lips
so desperately
against MINE
YOUR hair
in MY fingers
and when MY lips
away from HIS
and WE
into a hug
I look over HIS shoulder
it was YOURS
and a single tear
from MY eye
down MY cheek
until it finally
into the soft fabric
of HIS shirt
I wish
YOU could see
MY tears
and be there
for ME
when I
need YOU most.

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SilverLuna said...
Jun. 1, 2011 at 3:32 pm
I made a promise that I'd check out some of your work way back ago, and now I'm making good on that promise. I hope you forgive me for taking so long. As to the poem, I really liked it. The alternative type what with the capitals for emphasis really add an element both rythmically and tone-wise. Good job!(:
sparkofheart replied...
Aug. 20, 2011 at 11:06 am
Thank you so much!! It means a lot to me :) I love hearing everyone's feedback and it really helps me grow as a writer. 
starrr7 said...
Oct. 7, 2010 at 10:43 am
this is really relatable for me, you did a good job of expressing all the emotions...
sparkofheart replied...
Oct. 8, 2010 at 3:44 pm
thanks!! :)
Youth.of.the.Nation said...
Sept. 16, 2010 at 4:46 pm
AMAZING!!! The way you describe her internal battle with all the capitalization is awesomely fantastic- I loved every minute of it!!!
sparkofheart replied...
Oct. 8, 2010 at 3:43 pm
hey thank you!! that means a lot :)
apocalyptigirl said...
Sept. 13, 2010 at 8:46 pm
AHHHHH ZOMGZOMGZOMG I LOVE THIS. Everything about it was so cool---the capitalization of the pronouns, the structure, the descriptions of the kiss, the way you conveyed the speaker's emotion--- = favorite at first sight, lol. SERIOUSLY, this is GOOD. Like, AWESOME good. Ok im done now.
sparkofheart replied...
Sept. 13, 2010 at 10:09 pm
hahaha thanks! your enthusiasm totally pumps me up :)
LexieMonster said...
Sept. 3, 2010 at 6:49 am
This made me think. My past can relate to this so well. :) Love it.
sparkofheart replied...
Sept. 13, 2010 at 8:28 pm
thank youu :)
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