Four Saltines

June 7, 2010
By thescientistyellow GOLD, Nauvoo, Alabama
thescientistyellow GOLD, Nauvoo, Alabama
11 articles 2 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If everybody is thinking alike, then somebody isn't thinking." - George S. Patton


The hustle and bustle of neon perils
The beeps and buzzes from the cars at random intervals
All of it seems too much for me
What's five or ten minutes going to be?
Enough time to shed a blanket
On the cold confines of my soul
Heat myself up with a tune from the juke
Or wispy steam from the bisque
Not three, but four saltines if I may
But if not, hey, that's ok
Here is still where I’ll stay
And see the progress of life at ease
Inside the old cafe'


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lusis BRONZE said...
on Jul. 15 2010 at 1:06 pm
lusis BRONZE, San Jose, California
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Favorite Quote:
"It is the novelist's innate cowardice that makes him depute to imaginary personalities the sins that he is too cautious to commit for himself." Anthony Burgess

I like the image this created, the speaker just watching life go by inside a cafe. Your use of the words "neon perils" was especially attention grabbing :)

on Jul. 14 2010 at 9:23 pm
mudpuppy BRONZE, Orangeburg, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Life is like a box of cheese and flower petal sometimes it's soft and sweet, sometimes it just plain stinks. - M.J.

This poem reminded me of summer. I gives me a feeling of being stuck in traffic.

We-R-3 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 14 2010 at 2:13 pm
We-R-3 BRONZE, Orlando, Florida
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A picture is worth a thousand words, however it takes a real artist to turn words into pictures.

Have you heard about the new Lebron Iphone, you have to set it on vibrate because it doesn't have any rings

Very original, I love the clear message. I envy poets because they can right about anything and everything.

on Jul. 14 2010 at 1:37 pm
Leona123 SILVER, Kokomo, Indiana
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It is very descriptive article. You should really keep writing

Lindsay


on Jul. 13 2010 at 7:48 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

I love this, orginal and relatable, very interesting and well-put.  Your message is clear, and the voice is strong.  Great job.

KK2013 GOLD said...
on Jul. 13 2010 at 9:07 am
KK2013 GOLD, Solon, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Age is foolish and forgetful when it underestimates youth.-J. K. Rowling

Hmm, I had to read it twice in order to get it, but I liked it! very interesting. It has good descriptions, and I like how you didn't just say that city life was getting to be too much, but you showed it in a completely different way. NICE!

on Jul. 13 2010 at 9:03 am
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
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Part of the J7X team. :)

Good job! You had excellent diction in here! :)

on Jul. 13 2010 at 8:20 am
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

hey this is pretty good :) i like itt




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