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'MY GRIEF-STRICKEN STORY'

June 12, 2010
By harris,A BRONZE, Lahore, Other
harris,A BRONZE, Lahore, Other
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if nobody's,, perfect im nobody..


Im lying on my bed,with the pillow under my head.

Im thinking about you,on the contrary my vision is going dead.

Your face is omnipresent in my head,and i postulate I'll wont have you back.

The wounds you've made on my heart,wont seem to heal.

As the pain you've given me is too much real.

I held your hand for all of these years.
and i exempted you from tears.

I made you smile every time,and i wont stop doing that even if its a crime.

Ive come to decide that the things ive tried,were only to satisfy you.

but the good days we've had were very few.

Now im sitting here in my room,in the darkness i am alone.

Im waiting for your call and im staring at the phone.

I want my heart to be your home,
but you still hide and you still hide.



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on Dec. 3 2010 at 1:33 am
harris,A BRONZE, Lahore, Other
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
if nobody's,, perfect im nobody..

Thankyou DEE. ;)

Dee :) said...
on Nov. 26 2010 at 3:45 pm
amazing :) 

on Nov. 25 2010 at 11:00 am
harris,A BRONZE, Lahore, Other
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
if nobody's,, perfect im nobody..

Thank you Guys. Aiza i know you. Daisy kates..??

DAisyy_Kates said...
on Nov. 24 2010 at 6:38 am
AWESOME <3 <3 I'm Crying Now :(

Aiz.a.k said...
on Nov. 20 2010 at 4:57 am

W-0-W. :) Awesome.

 


Shazee said...
on Nov. 10 2010 at 10:07 am
good job , now lets finish our song =)

on Aug. 6 2010 at 5:44 am
harris,A BRONZE, Lahore, Other
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
if nobody's,, perfect im nobody..

thanks you so much.

hareem said...
on Aug. 6 2010 at 5:38 am
wow its amazing! very impressive :))

Unknown said...
on Aug. 3 2010 at 5:04 am
FiT yar...Boohat ala.Keep it u..:)

on Jul. 13 2010 at 8:25 am
harris,A BRONZE, Lahore, Other
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
if nobody's,, perfect im nobody..

thanks..guys..appreciate it.!

on Jul. 13 2010 at 7:07 am
gud................nice !!!!!!!!

MANI said...
on Jul. 13 2010 at 6:44 am
ALLA yawr nice....did'nt ur such a alla POET!!:D

sid burney said...
on Jul. 13 2010 at 6:14 am

A Grrrrrrrrrrr8 piece of writing  by

Grrrrrrrrrrr8 person ......

:)marvellous....

Excellento dude...:)

 


muk 599 said...
on Jul. 13 2010 at 6:12 am
its a good one yaar

shiza.A said...
on Jul. 13 2010 at 6:03 am
very nice..i luv it!!

on Jul. 13 2010 at 5:57 am
harris,A BRONZE, Lahore, Other
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
if nobody's,, perfect im nobody..

thanks..appreciate it.

on Jul. 11 2010 at 3:21 pm
Daydreamer14 PLATINUM, Norman, Oklahoma
40 articles 3 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Reality leaves a lot to the imagination." - John Lennon

I really like this poem! Maybe it's just me but I'd consider changing the last line. It flowed so well and then I read the last line and it didn't seem to fit. Overall though great job!:)