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Take Me..

you beat me,
mistreat me,
you leave me,
you lose me,
you love me,
you hate me,
you sit and abuse me!
im lost at words,
helpless in action,
your the love of my life,
cant you show passion?
your heart was once whole,
now i see that it's black,
i dont understand
what did i do for that smack?
why do you do this,
these actions of hate,
look me in the eyes,
do i look like it's fake?
these tears are real,
so is the fear,
you instilled this on me,
their finally here.
Take me...



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pinkypromise23 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 12, 2010 at 5:07 pm:
this is sooo good!
 
TheChemicalKidd replied...
Jul. 12, 2010 at 5:59 pm :
Thank youu
 
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Luckycharms said...
Jul. 10, 2010 at 6:30 pm:
Poem was SOO good
 
TheChemicalKidd replied...
Jul. 10, 2010 at 7:41 pm :
thank you =]
 
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ShenelleCrystalx3 said...
Jul. 10, 2010 at 2:49 pm:
I LOVE THIS =] !! . I feel bad so bad for these innocent animals and your poem really showed how much someone could care about them . Very well written . Please check out my work :)
 
TheChemicalKidd replied...
Jul. 10, 2010 at 7:42 pm :
thanks so much. i will do that 
 
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angel of music said...
Jul. 9, 2010 at 3:48 pm:
I am a major animal lover too. Iplan to work with them when I get older. Your poem was beautiful and the words flowed. It was really good. keep writing.
 
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IamtheStargirlThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 9, 2010 at 1:39 pm:
The way your rhymes flow is so cool! I am terrible at rhyiming, it always seems really forced.
 
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WritingLoverForeverThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 8, 2010 at 8:46 pm:
Finally! Someone who understands how cruel it is to absue animals like that. This poem is just beautiful and I bet it'll reach out to many people. Animals don't deserve the mistreatment they are given. I don't know how anyone could possibly have the gall to hurt animals like there's no shame of it. Wonderful job on this poem, and could you please check out some of my work?
 
TheChemicalKidd replied...
Jul. 8, 2010 at 11:34 pm :
Yeah, ide love to check out some of your work.
 
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ChelzHThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 8, 2010 at 7:53 pm:

I  really like this, I love animals. :) I have two dogs and a guinea pig :)

I couldn't imagine hurting them, </3

 
TheChemicalKidd replied...
Jul. 8, 2010 at 11:33 pm :
Me too lol. =]
 
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writingchickThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 8, 2010 at 10:43 am:
I wrote a poem about animal abuse too! i think it's sooooo wrong. Everyday i arrange fundraiser for our local shelter and i volunteer there too. anyways good poem. I loved how you showed it from the animals perspective. Keep it up
 
TheChemicalKidd replied...
Jul. 8, 2010 at 1:24 pm :
Glad to see im not the only one =)
 
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4tun81 said...
Jul. 8, 2010 at 9:04 am:
I like it :) I wrote a poem about animal abuse too. I love animals
 
TheChemicalKidd replied...
Jul. 8, 2010 at 9:17 am :
thank you =] animalss <3 haha
 
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