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Hyena

The hurricane gallops in
Like the swift approach of a hyena
It tears up trees and dwellings
And stuffs them in its hungry maw
Cackling and whistling with rage
Swiping them with a swirling paw
Over the sea and plains it roams
Destroying creatures, people’s homes
Then it whirls itself to sleep
It is not here long to stay
Then, as a loathsome coward,
Slowly, slowly, slinks away





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dreamer said...
Jul. 27, 2010 at 1:18 pm
This is very powerful. I like the imagery.
 
gymbabe This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 27, 2010 at 3:34 pm
Thanks:)  
 
alenkaaa said...
Jul. 10, 2010 at 2:48 pm
This is REALLY good! i love your choice of words!
 
gymbabe This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 10, 2010 at 3:32 pm
Thanks!:) 
 
toflyaway said...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 10:40 pm
I agree with you description! Great use of description, creates a really vivid image! :)
 
gymbabe This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 10:46 pm
Thanks!:) 
 
Stargirl212 said...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 1:42 pm
I love it!! Keep writing :)
 
gymbabe This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 3:39 pm
Thanks!  I had to do this for school, so I'm glad you enjoyed it:)
 
Cigg.Sunn replied...
Jul. 12, 2010 at 11:30 am

I did not comment your story just cause i'm on a short time.

But I will get around to it and you will be reciving my comment soon.

I agree that comparing something so unexplainable, and giving it qualities, wheather they be animal, or human qualites gives it more of a ZING :D

The useage of a hyena was great! A powerful anf sly creature, for a poweful and shy forcast! :D

 
gymbabe This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 12, 2010 at 4:06 pm
Thank you so much!  I really like comparing weather and people to animals, you find more similarities than you'd think.
 
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