Why...

June 4, 2010
By Alternatively BRONZE, Sorry, California
Alternatively BRONZE, Sorry, California
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Favorite Quote:
“I've never been lonely. I've been in a room -- I've felt suicidal. I've been depressed. I've felt awful -- awful beyond all -- but I never felt that one other person could enter that room and cure what was bothering me...or that any number of people could enter that room. In other words, loneliness is something I've never been bothered with because I've always had this terrible itch for solitude.


I don’t even know why,
Why I try
When all I do is fail
Trying will never avail.
I work and work
Never to shirk
And yet I do not succeed
And in turn shall lead
To a hopeless me
With dreams that are even more blurry.

How do they do it?
That type of Flawless culprit.
They couldn’t trip if they tried.
They never cried.
For them, it comes naturally.
Jumping blindly
Over and over the vault
Never—not ever—with fault.

A me without hope
Makes me wish to elope
But I know
The trees that billow
And cover my mind with dread
Makes me feel half dead
And still I try
Oh why—why.
For, when I so desperately try
Still, it goes awry
Of all the things I do to be
A perfect beauty.
I cannot help but be
Poor, uneventful me.



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on Jul. 10 2010 at 12:20 pm
smilebright BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
"Your only in trouble if you get caught"- Aladdin

the feeling of hopelessness is easy to relate to

on Jul. 5 2010 at 11:28 pm
Alternatively BRONZE, Sorry, California
2 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I've never been lonely. I've been in a room -- I've felt suicidal. I've been depressed. I've felt awful -- awful beyond all -- but I never felt that one other person could enter that room and cure what was bothering me...or that any number of people could enter that room. In other words, loneliness is something I've never been bothered with because I've always had this terrible itch for solitude.

Thanks so much... :) It's really cool to know that like what i feel and put into words can be appreciated by people.

on Jul. 4 2010 at 10:03 pm
CourtneyLou BRONZE, SLIDELL, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
Some would rather be miserable then risk being happy ~Robert Anthony

I really like this it was very creative and easy to follow :)

keep your head up nobodys perfect :)


on Jul. 3 2010 at 3:53 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

This poem is very rhythmic. The feeling of hopelessness and frustration was conveyed very naturally. I could identify with the feeling of the poem, that I try so hard but fail. The last two lines were almost my favorite.




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