I Was Afraid

May 23, 2010
By -Kal- GOLD, Carthage, North Carolina
-Kal- GOLD, Carthage, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Faith sees the invisible, believes the incredible, and recieves the impossible"
-Anonymous


I saw them make their entry, and I was afraid.
I saw the glisten of their skin, the beady look in their eyes, and I was afraid.
I saw what they did to that poor child, I heard her screams, and I was afraid.
I saw them turn on me, and I was terribly afraid.
I saw them rush towards me on a wave of power, and I was afraid.
I saw them close the distance between us, and I was afraid.
I saw the distance dissappear, saw the blood, and I was afraid.
Then I saw her, my angel, and I was no longer afraid.


The author's comments:
This is a poem I wrote and, at the suggestion of others, I decided to submit it. I like to think that it can be interpreted in many ways, so please try to think about it in more ways than one and let me know what you come up with. Thanks guys!

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-Emie- SILVER said...
on Jun. 7 2011 at 11:15 am
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

Well, first off, I like this poem. Second... I'm hoping that you maybe get alerts when someone posts on your articles. I'm trying to get back in contact with you, Kal. :)

-Kal- GOLD said...
on Oct. 30 2010 at 7:48 pm
-Kal- GOLD, Carthage, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Faith sees the invisible, believes the incredible, and recieves the impossible"
-Anonymous

Alright then everyone, I'll tell you what it is. The truth is that I was at the beach one time and a swarm of huge stingrays approached us. One was about as far away from me as the "Join the Discussion" heading is long. Obviously I made part of this up, but the main parts are true. :)

on Sep. 25 2010 at 5:25 pm
Swindlewick SILVER, ..., Washington
8 articles 2 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I do not agree with what you have to say, but I will defend to the death your right to say it." ~Voltaire

Kinda sounds like a bank robbery or something, where the men have weapons and are a little trigger happy.

I am probably wrong. But hey, I tried.


-Kal- GOLD said...
on Sep. 21 2010 at 6:41 pm
-Kal- GOLD, Carthage, North Carolina
14 articles 0 photos 244 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Faith sees the invisible, believes the incredible, and recieves the impossible"
-Anonymous

Thank you :)    

on Sep. 21 2010 at 6:35 pm
XXXXXShIaNeNeIsMeXXXXX SILVER, Rio Rancho, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"love is complicated but wonderful"

Kal I have known you since I have been on here and I love every piece of your writing!

on Sep. 19 2010 at 8:19 pm
ForeverFelix PLATINUM, Catasauqua, Pennsylvania
30 articles 2 photos 207 comments

Favorite Quote:
Daydreams can be worse than nightmares, but that never stops me.

Then what is it? seriously! lol

-Kal- GOLD said...
on Sep. 19 2010 at 8:04 pm
-Kal- GOLD, Carthage, North Carolina
14 articles 0 photos 244 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Faith sees the invisible, believes the incredible, and recieves the impossible"
-Anonymous

Thanks you guys. Nobody has guessed it yet, but I can't really expect anyone to. Lol :)

on Sep. 18 2010 at 2:46 pm
ForeverFelix PLATINUM, Catasauqua, Pennsylvania
30 articles 2 photos 207 comments

Favorite Quote:
Daydreams can be worse than nightmares, but that never stops me.

I agree with wellington...however, let me say that I think it was really good despite being semi-repetitive. I came up with a few different scenerios that flashed through my mind throughout it, too...

 

Vampire attack (glistening skin, vamps are pale =) )

Randomly kidnapped with a random little girl...and then murdered

Simply murdered with a random little girl

Other mythological creatures besides vampires (if you can't tell, I like fantasy).

Um...I think that's it. good job =) Keep writing!


on Sep. 18 2010 at 1:05 pm
Wellington BRONZE, Ann Arbor, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
A man is not finished when he is defeated. He is finished when he quits.
Richard M. Nixon

i'm sorry to disagree with many others here, but this to me feels just a little repetitive. i feel like the language in this is not as elegant as i would like to be...but its good

-Kal- GOLD said...
on Sep. 4 2010 at 11:53 am
-Kal- GOLD, Carthage, North Carolina
14 articles 0 photos 244 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Faith sees the invisible, believes the incredible, and recieves the impossible"
-Anonymous

Haha, I hadn't thought about it that way... Interesting perspective Riley

riley... GOLD said...
on Aug. 15 2010 at 8:01 pm
riley... GOLD, Yakima, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"i became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity." edgar allen poe.

good poem! really conveyed terror well.

 

and oddly enough, reminded me of the kidnap scene from the movie "taken." haha.


-Kal- GOLD said...
on Jul. 27 2010 at 9:14 pm
-Kal- GOLD, Carthage, North Carolina
14 articles 0 photos 244 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Faith sees the invisible, believes the incredible, and recieves the impossible"
-Anonymous

Thanks buddies!!!!!

 

P.S. I think it funny that nobody has even come close to guessing the truth about this :)


on Jul. 16 2010 at 3:36 pm
RedvinesWTHCantTheyDo GOLD, Zephyrhills, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"You make one more comment like that I will wrap you in a tortilla shell and eat you as a snack, maybe with some nice pico de gillo."~ Lauren Lopez in Starship
"If you don't die for something, I'll kill you for nothing."~ Lauren Lopez in Starship

It seemms like Ive read this before but I cant remember. Oh well thats nothing new lol. Anyways, after my rambling which as you know I do so well, there I go again. It was good Kaleb. You conveyed emotion and it was excellent. Anyways I am willing my fingers to stop typing now lol.

on Jul. 7 2010 at 1:58 pm
writerscramp01 GOLD, Green Bay, Wisconsin
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KAL!
As with everything you write, I love it!

Keep writing til you can't anymore, then pick up your pen and write some more!

<3

Writerscamp :)


on Jun. 24 2010 at 2:54 pm
Chinadoll BRONZE, Dallas, Texas
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Also it kinda reminds me of emotions kinda of

on Jun. 24 2010 at 2:53 pm
Chinadoll BRONZE, Dallas, Texas
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Very interesting! As always, not many words but big impact. What comes to mind when reading this is demons and cancer and domestic violence. Yeah I know weird mix. But anyway great job!

Also could you look at some of my work? I have new stuff out and would love your input. Thanks!



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