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I saw them make their entry, and I was afraid.
I saw the glisten of their skin, the beady look in their eyes, and I was afraid.
I saw what they did to that poor child, I heard her screams, and I was afraid.
I saw them turn on me, and I was terribly afraid.
I saw them rush towards me on a wave of power, and I was afraid.
I saw them close the distance between us, and I was afraid.
I saw the distance dissappear, saw the blood, and I was afraid.
Then I saw her, my angel, and I was no longer afraid.



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-Jandee-Half-Psychotic- said...
Jun. 7, 2011 at 11:15 am:
Well, first off, I like this poem. Second... I'm hoping that you maybe get alerts when someone posts on your articles. I'm trying to get back in contact with you, Kal. :)
 
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-Kal- said...
Oct. 30, 2010 at 7:48 pm:
Alright then everyone, I'll tell you what it is. The truth is that I was at the beach one time and a swarm of huge stingrays approached us. One was about as far away from me as the "Join the Discussion" heading is long. Obviously I made part of this up, but the main parts are true. :)
 
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Tenthmuse said...
Sept. 25, 2010 at 5:25 pm:

Kinda sounds like a bank robbery or something, where the men have weapons and are a little trigger happy.

I am probably wrong. But hey, I tried.

 
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CallMeFelix said...
Sept. 18, 2010 at 2:46 pm:

I agree with wellington...however, let me say that I think it was really good despite being semi-repetitive. I came up with a few different scenerios that flashed through my mind throughout it, too...

 

Vampire attack (glistening skin, vamps are pale =) )

Randomly kidnapped with a random little girl...and then murdered

Simply murdered with a random little girl

Other mythological creatures besides vampires (if you can't tell, I like fantasy).

Um..... (more »)

 
-Kal- replied...
Sept. 19, 2010 at 8:04 pm :
Thanks you guys. Nobody has guessed it yet, but I can't really expect anyone to. Lol :)
 
CallMeFelix replied...
Sept. 19, 2010 at 8:19 pm :
Then what is it? seriously! lol
 
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Wellington This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 18, 2010 at 1:05 pm:
i'm sorry to disagree with many others here, but this to me feels just a little repetitive. i feel like the language in this is not as elegant as i would like to be...but its good
 
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riley... said...
Aug. 15, 2010 at 8:01 pm:

good poem! really conveyed terror well.

 

and oddly enough, reminded me of the kidnap scene from the movie "taken." haha.

 
-Kal- replied...
Sept. 4, 2010 at 11:53 am :
Haha, I hadn't thought about it that way... Interesting perspective Riley
 
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MadAsAHatter... said...
Jul. 16, 2010 at 3:36 pm:
It seemms like Ive read this before but I cant remember. Oh well thats nothing new lol. Anyways, after my rambling which as you know I do so well, there I go again. It was good Kaleb. You conveyed emotion and it was excellent. Anyways I am willing my fingers to stop typing now lol.
 
-Kal- replied...
Jul. 27, 2010 at 9:14 pm :

Thanks buddies!!!!!

 

P.S. I think it funny that nobody has even come close to guessing the truth about this :)

 
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writerscramp01 said...
Jul. 7, 2010 at 1:58 pm:

KAL!
As with everything you write, I love it!

Keep writing til you can't anymore, then pick up your pen and write some more!

<3

Writerscamp :)

 
XXXXXShIaNeNeIsMeXXXXX replied...
Sept. 21, 2010 at 6:35 pm :
Kal I have known you since I have been on here and I love every piece of your writing!
 
-Kal- replied...
Sept. 21, 2010 at 6:41 pm :
Thank you :)    
 
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Asianflowers said...
Jun. 24, 2010 at 2:53 pm:

Very interesting! As always, not many words but big impact. What comes to mind when reading this is demons and cancer and domestic violence. Yeah I know weird mix. But anyway great job!

Also could you look at some of my work? I have new stuff out and would love your input. Thanks!

 
Asianflowers replied...
Jun. 24, 2010 at 2:54 pm :
Also it kinda reminds me of emotions kinda of
 
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