Time Stands Still

May 18, 2010
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We walked along just the two o f us
Rain drops pelting down like bullets
All was quiet
Not a car passed by
No birds chirped in the trees
All lights are frozen
Everything is still
It is unnerving
We continue
Our footsteps
With every splash of rain
Anticipation grows
We wait to hear some sound
A look at each other
Our lips are sealed
For fear of breaking this enchanting spell
Time is at a stand still
Only we have not been altered by the change
We are lost in a dimension
Nothing moves
All exists

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xovanillatwilightxo This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 29, 2010 at 9:45 am
beautiful. i love those last two lines "nothing moves, all exists" youre a great writer! check out my work?:)
BabyV replied...
Jul. 8, 2010 at 11:12 pm
This was really good the setting was perfectelly set and i enjoyed reading it.
Derfie said...
Jun. 27, 2010 at 9:41 pm
The description is amazing, I love how clear the scene is. You capture perfectly the feeling of what I'm assuming is two new lovers feeling like the world stands still while they try to gather the nerve for a first kiss. Or something along those lines.
Britney15 replied...
Jun. 28, 2010 at 1:05 pm
yes this is exactly what it is about i'm glad you understand it. thank you :)
Poolee33 said...
Jun. 22, 2010 at 1:57 pm
man this is really good i had to show my appreciation and return the love.
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