My only question....

May 17, 2010
I don't know where my mind is,
I think my heart has left its home,
I feel as if I am destined,
To walk this road alone,
Unfulfilled promises,
Come from left and right,
I am unable to grasp this concept,
Is it even worth the fight?
Will I ever be satisfied?
Will I ever feel complete?
Is this all just one big game
Must I accept defeat?
Emptiness consumes me,
My should grows dark and cold
Will this passion in my veins
Ever find its home
Are you here to help me?
Or are you here to simply watch me fall,
These are questions that I ask myself
I seek only the truth or no answer at all,
Only time will tell these things
Until then my life is on a hold
My life remains empty
And my heart will just stay cold.

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megpie000 said...
Jun. 11, 2010 at 8:45 am

WOW THIS IS REALLY GOOD!!! Keep writing!! And thank you for the feedback on mine! It helps me become a better writer! Anyways good luck with all your writing! 

God bless you,


kandyraye replied...
Jun. 12, 2010 at 12:39 am
You are a good writer as it is.... Its just that poem was more of a story. You have a way with words it just seems as if you are putting more effort into it than there needs to be. You have grasped the concept that poems do not indeed have to rhym and you understand the power of emotion. My writing is far from perfect and I seek negative feedback as opposed to positive. Lets me know what I am already squared away with and what I need to work on.
megpie000 replied...
Jun. 12, 2010 at 11:37 pm
Its actually really good... im pretty bad with critism
angel of music said...
Jun. 10, 2010 at 11:04 am
You are so good, I don't know why no one has commented yet. It's great, keep writing.
kandyraye replied...
Jun. 11, 2010 at 12:46 am
Thank you so much. You are the first ever to comment on any of my entries!!!
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