Open Your Eyes MAG

June 1, 2010
By Solange GOLD, Brooklyn, New York
Solange GOLD, Brooklyn, New York
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My friend once asked me
Why I looked so sad, and
(laughing)
I told her
(only half a lie) that
I was just thinking, and
It seemed so odd
For her to wonder.
(I thought)
Maybe if she opened her
(brown) eyes
And really bothered to
Look (without sunglasses),
She might see what
color the sky is
(not blue) and
Maybe she wouldn’t ask
(such a convoluted question),
Because
Maybe she would be sad
(too).



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KylieK GOLD said...
on Apr. 29 2013 at 11:43 am
KylieK GOLD, Mt. Washington, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"To love is to surpass one's self."

Well, I'm a fan :)

on Nov. 28 2010 at 7:11 pm
NikkiNitrogen GOLD, Troy, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Love is the slowest form of suicide."
" The loudest cry is silence."
" Light travel faster then sounde this why most people appear bright until you hear them speak."
"The best beauty comes from the worst pain."

this is awesome

on Aug. 18 2010 at 10:33 pm
liv.laf.love13 SILVER, El Paso, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
MUSIC IS THE CURE!!

i think my heart just felt something new bravo!!

on Aug. 16 2010 at 11:04 am
LaughingGirl GOLD, Ocala, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Play the music not the instrument. -Author Unknown

I loved this piece of work because it has multiple meanings to a reader, like why the narrarator is so sad. It's written wonderfully and as MelaineLouise already said, "bloody brilliant". So, I agree...keep writing!

on Jul. 28 2010 at 6:18 pm
MelanieLouise PLATINUM, Plymouth, Minnesota
37 articles 0 photos 81 comments

Favorite Quote:
to live a creative life, we must lose our fear of being wrong

bloody brilliant. keep writing, Mel

ivyflight said...
on Jul. 28 2010 at 4:47 pm
This was brilliantly written, I loved how you added thoughts in the parenthesis, and the initial idea of the poem.

cmore PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 28 2010 at 12:10 pm
cmore PLATINUM, North Vancouver, Other
20 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Why do I dance? Why do you breathe?"

I love this. :)

on Jun. 27 2010 at 10:04 pm
momentofweakness BRONZE, Ottawa, Other
3 articles 0 photos 8 comments
this is so great. i love your writing style- it's simplistic and direct, but it's still incredibly effective. wonderful job! (:

on Jun. 14 2010 at 6:39 pm
Daydreamer14 PLATINUM, Norman, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
"Reality leaves a lot to the imagination." - John Lennon

Has great rythm and flow, I loved everything about it! Good job!:)

on Jun. 6 2010 at 5:31 pm
crubs33 DIAMOND, Lido Beach, New York
58 articles 3 photos 750 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The most courageous act is still to think for yourself. Aloud."- Coco Chanel
Life isn't about surviving the storm, it's about learning to dance in the rain.

This was really good!!!

on Jun. 2 2010 at 8:56 pm
DustyCheyanne<3 SILVER, Excelsior Springs, Missouri
7 articles 3 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
Its going to hurt, before it feels better. Trust me.. Its worth it.

i loved this, alot (: Superb job!

Please check out some of my stuff and tell me what you think.


on Jun. 2 2010 at 8:03 pm
Lilacs_Smell_Wonnerful PLATINUM, Milwaukee, Wisconsin
40 articles 2 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons make grape juice. Then sit back and watch everyone look at you in amazement. :)

This is a very nice poem! It has good rhythm, and the sound is original. Good job and keep writing please. :)

-Lilac


CloneA BRONZE said...
on Jun. 2 2010 at 6:46 pm
CloneA BRONZE, Wexford, Pennsylvania
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This poem is lovely to read - I love the flow, but also the message! Keep writing :)

on Jun. 2 2010 at 5:50 pm
Ninja_Writer BRONZE, Western Springs, Illinois
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I loved this piece. Keep writing

on Jun. 2 2010 at 5:47 pm
Sileron-evol PLATINUM, Providence, Rhode Island
44 articles 0 photos 98 comments

Favorite Quote:
"we are captives of our own identities, living in prisons of our own creation"

Loved iht :D

on Jun. 2 2010 at 5:25 pm
pinkypromise23 PLATINUM, Cranston, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
i know that you believe you understand what you think i said, but im not sure you realize that what you heard is not what i meant.

wow this is really good! (:

on Jun. 2 2010 at 6:53 am
AndTheVinesSpin GOLD, Romulus, Michigan
11 articles 1 photo 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is the Movement" -TWLOHA
"Love is our weapon." -Christofer Drew
"I'ma get me a High School Diploma, even if I gotta steal one!" -ThisKidInMyMathClassLol

Wonderful...

on Jun. 1 2010 at 9:14 pm
aliveonink GOLD, Rochester, Minnesota
10 articles 0 photos 27 comments
this is really good!i like how you described it more in parentacies

on Jun. 1 2010 at 4:25 pm
TheSummoningFreak PLATINUM, Lugoff, South Carolina
41 articles 0 photos 122 comments

Favorite Quote:
if you can never let yourself fall you'll never know what it's like to love

i love this!! it's really good and i just love it you have really good talent

Nyrihaz said...
on Jun. 1 2010 at 4:16 pm
Nyrihaz, Isabela, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Listen to the screams a silent room makes"

I really loved this. Especially the line about the sky not being blue... it makes you think (and be sad) too ;)  Is a very good piece, with all the things it say and don't say.

 





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