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Drinking Hocley

April 29, 2010
By fishhead919 BRONZE, Allentown, Pennsylvania
fishhead919 BRONZE, Allentown, Pennsylvania
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Tongue shriveling from mountains of salt,
Having just eaten some sesame beef,
Thirsting for gallons of
Quenching cold fluid

Is that a water fountain?
Sighting the thirst-ceasing source
Racing down the hallway,
Glancing at a pile of tired equipment,
Entering a miasma of
Choking odor,
Eyes tearing,
Vision clouding,
Lungs coughing,
Throat gagging,
Stomach seizing,
Body bending,

I hold my nose.
Hitting the button and holding it down,
Sipping the arc of glistening water,
Tasting sweat,
Inhaling armpits,
Swigging sweat socks,
Gulping jerseys,
Swallowing undershirts,

I sip not water, but hockey itself.



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Mimi said...
on Jun. 3 2010 at 7:32 am
I felt it- what literary prowess!

A-1 biscotti said...
on May. 27 2010 at 2:13 pm
amazing poem -perfect pitch- a sensory buffet- thanks for sharing-  way beyond flarf.

Gleedah said...
on May. 27 2010 at 6:54 am

Very good imagery and vocabulary. I was confused by the title until I read your correction. 

Go Flyers! 

 


WienerDog said...
on May. 27 2010 at 6:54 am
Miasma...nice.

leeny said...
on May. 27 2010 at 6:37 am
I loved it- the excitement of the chase, the energy, the use of tempo- all great.

Englishteach said...
on May. 27 2010 at 6:07 am
Great poem--you learned a lot in poetry class! Another Frost in the making??

Msvigneri said...
on May. 27 2010 at 5:14 am

Wonderful poem. Wonderful use of imagery and beautiful structure!

Nice work, proud to know you.


girl said...
on May. 26 2010 at 9:06 pm
loved it!!! I can smell those smelly hockey boys right now, Eew!!!!!!!!!

on May. 26 2010 at 8:40 pm
fishhead919 BRONZE, Allentown, Pennsylvania
2 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Correction: The title is "Drinking Hockey"

-The poet