The Broken Part of Me

May 20, 2010
By once_a_redhead SILVER, Lady Lake, Florida
once_a_redhead SILVER, Lady Lake, Florida
9 articles 0 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"love is somethin' we all feel even if we don't know that we do!!"


I could've loved you.
I could've taken care of you.
I could've shown you the heart that beats inside my breast.
I live my day to day life.
Talking to friends,doing my school, helping at home.
But inside it's agony.
A part of my heart is gone.
A part of me has flown into the sea of death.
That part of me is you.
You threw me away for a "cooler way" of living.
I tell myself to move on.
But your memory returns.
No one knows, for that would bring shame and pity.
I hate pity.
I try to hate you but it seems fragments of you are lodged in my heart.
My breast tightens,a tear rolls down my cheek.
And all the lonesomeness of nights gone by repeats itself.


The author's comments:
this piece was inspiried by a lost love and all those out here that can relate to how this feels.

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on Jun. 8 2010 at 4:11 pm
roxymutt BRONZE, Marietta, Georgia
4 articles 5 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's not what you look at that matters, it's what you see. -David Henry Thoreau

I liked this...its a feeling that a lot of people must go through...especially as teenagers... everyone has the one that got away and we have to deal

on May. 30 2010 at 1:18 pm
ElijahN PLATINUM, Livonia, Michigan
31 articles 0 photos 150 comments

Favorite Quote:
"only after you've lost everything, that you're free to do anything."-Tyler Durdan -Fight Club-

haha you've told me. I love yours, too.

on May. 30 2010 at 12:32 pm
once_a_redhead SILVER, Lady Lake, Florida
9 articles 0 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"love is somethin' we all feel even if we don't know that we do!!"

thanks!! i like your work!!

on May. 30 2010 at 12:22 pm
ElijahN PLATINUM, Livonia, Michigan
31 articles 0 photos 150 comments

Favorite Quote:
"only after you've lost everything, that you're free to do anything."-Tyler Durdan -Fight Club-

It's nice.

on May. 29 2010 at 8:23 pm
once_a_redhead SILVER, Lady Lake, Florida
9 articles 0 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"love is somethin' we all feel even if we don't know that we do!!"

yes id id!!! hehe

on May. 29 2010 at 3:40 pm
ElijahN PLATINUM, Livonia, Michigan
31 articles 0 photos 150 comments

Favorite Quote:
"only after you've lost everything, that you're free to do anything."-Tyler Durdan -Fight Club-

changed your name?

on May. 29 2010 at 11:41 am
once_a_redhead SILVER, Lady Lake, Florida
9 articles 0 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"love is somethin' we all feel even if we don't know that we do!!"

yes it is very personal!!! thank you for your comments elijah and everyone!!!

on May. 29 2010 at 11:13 am
ElijahN PLATINUM, Livonia, Michigan
31 articles 0 photos 150 comments

Favorite Quote:
"only after you've lost everything, that you're free to do anything."-Tyler Durdan -Fight Club-

also very personal work, it's great.

on May. 29 2010 at 5:06 am
once_a_redhead SILVER, Lady Lake, Florida
9 articles 0 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"love is somethin' we all feel even if we don't know that we do!!"

thank u all for commentin, and yes i know u r . i think the best type of poem r the personal ones!!

on May. 29 2010 at 1:34 am
Wow, this is really really good honey. The raw emotion just radiates from your words. I'm sorry you had to go through that, but I'm here for you now :)

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on May. 27 2010 at 8:17 pm
aww this is very nice.. i wish i couldn't relate to the emotions so easy.. triggers memories. lovely.

on May. 27 2010 at 7:52 pm
once_a_redhead SILVER, Lady Lake, Florida
9 articles 0 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"love is somethin' we all feel even if we don't know that we do!!"

any more!!??

on May. 24 2010 at 1:51 pm
ElijahN PLATINUM, Livonia, Michigan
31 articles 0 photos 150 comments

Favorite Quote:
"only after you've lost everything, that you're free to do anything."-Tyler Durdan -Fight Club-

that's how it always feels, right?? the "i try to hate you" part but it always fails haha. 5/5

on May. 23 2010 at 8:21 pm
once_a_redhead SILVER, Lady Lake, Florida
9 articles 0 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"love is somethin' we all feel even if we don't know that we do!!"

thanks!!! it means alot to me!!

on May. 23 2010 at 8:20 pm
SarClark BRONZE, NC, Connecticut
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This is amazing. Absolutely stunning. I loved it!

on May. 23 2010 at 1:30 pm
once_a_redhead SILVER, Lady Lake, Florida
9 articles 0 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"love is somethin' we all feel even if we don't know that we do!!"

thanks !!!!

on May. 23 2010 at 9:37 am
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

i can tell this poem had real emotion:))) koooooll. ya did good kid lol :DDD

on May. 22 2010 at 2:43 pm
once_a_redhead SILVER, Lady Lake, Florida
9 articles 0 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"love is somethin' we all feel even if we don't know that we do!!"

please comment on my  newest peice i appr. anytype of coments good news or bad. thanks!!!


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