The Broken Part of Me

May 20, 2010
I could've loved you.
I could've taken care of you.
I could've shown you the heart that beats inside my breast.
I live my day to day life.
Talking to friends,doing my school, helping at home.
But inside it's agony.
A part of my heart is gone.
A part of me has flown into the sea of death.
That part of me is you.
You threw me away for a "cooler way" of living.
I tell myself to move on.
But your memory returns.
No one knows, for that would bring shame and pity.
I hate pity.
I try to hate you but it seems fragments of you are lodged in my heart.
My breast tightens,a tear rolls down my cheek.
And all the lonesomeness of nights gone by repeats itself.

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roxymutt said...
Jun. 8, 2010 at 4:11 pm
I liked this...its a feeling that a lot of people must go through...especially as teenagers... everyone has the one that got away and we have to deal
Six_Tooth_Sun said...
May 29, 2010 at 1:34 am
Wow, this is really really good honey. The raw emotion just radiates from your words. I'm sorry you had to go through that, but I'm here for you now :)
once_a_redhead replied...
May 29, 2010 at 5:06 am
thank u all for commentin, and yes i know u r . i think the best type of poem r the personal ones!!
burnt-toast said...
May 27, 2010 at 8:17 pm
aww this is very nice.. i wish i couldn't relate to the emotions so easy.. triggers memories. lovely.
ElijahN said...
May 24, 2010 at 1:51 pm
that's how it always feels, right?? the "i try to hate you" part but it always fails haha. 5/5
ElijahN replied...
May 29, 2010 at 11:13 am
also very personal work, it's great.
once_a_redhead replied...
May 29, 2010 at 11:41 am
yes it is very personal!!! thank you for your comments elijah and everyone!!!
ElijahN replied...
May 29, 2010 at 3:40 pm
changed your name?
once_a_redhead replied...
May 29, 2010 at 8:23 pm
yes id id!!! hehe
ElijahN replied...
May 30, 2010 at 12:22 pm
It's nice.
once_a_redhead replied...
May 30, 2010 at 12:32 pm
thanks!! i like your work!!
ElijahN replied...
May 30, 2010 at 1:18 pm
haha you've told me. I love yours, too.
jonas_chick899 said...
May 23, 2010 at 9:37 am
i can tell this poem had real emotion:))) koooooll. ya did good kid lol :DDD
kirbybug said...
May 22, 2010 at 2:43 pm
please comment on my  newest peice i appr. anytype of coments good news or bad. thanks!!!
kirbybug replied...
May 23, 2010 at 1:30 pm
thanks !!!!
AprilBlue replied...
May 23, 2010 at 8:20 pm
This is amazing. Absolutely stunning. I loved it!
kirbybug replied...
May 23, 2010 at 8:21 pm
thanks!!! it means alot to me!!
once_a_redhead replied...
May 27, 2010 at 7:52 pm
any more!!??
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