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What is an attempt to dream
Is it as easy as it seems
if it gets destroyed and unravels at the seams
a child attempt at dreams
when do we care
do we care when the child wakes up in fright
because the monsters it only saw at night
finally came in sight
how do they feel
when they discover their monsters are real
what happens to that child who always asked why
because the one closest to them lie
how do they attempt to dream?
What does a child know
when the person around them doesn't know the meaning of no
How do you help a child that feels worthless
And the people who did it to them is mirthless
What is an attempt to dream
Is it as easy as it seems
if it gets destroyed and unravels at the seams

What is an attempt to dream
how do you even try
when everyone around you want you to die
How do you survive when you are so hated
And every attempt to change seem so jaded
can you forgive yourself for that mistake
How can you when God and everyone else chose to forsake
how do they attempt to dream?
When your life was lost
and someones life was the cost
How can you live with blood on your hands
how can you see hope when it lands
when your guilt makes you blind
and you miss anything that's kind
The hatefulness and the angry glares was what they didn't need
because punishing themselves forever is the choice they decided to lead
What is an attempt to dream
Is it as easy as it seems
if it gets destroyed and unravels at the seams





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Toni M. said...
Jun. 18, 2010 at 11:09 pm
you are just as good as i am on writing and rhyming. this will be added to my list of things i wish i had writen. sigh dare to dream.
 
BabyV replied...
Jun. 18, 2010 at 11:19 pm
thanks that was sooooo nice, and it made me feel really good
 
ComA_White said...
Jun. 18, 2010 at 9:04 pm
OOOH This is awesome :)  It's very emotional and it really speaks to me. Good job :)
 
_ashh said...
Jun. 2, 2010 at 4:00 pm

i really enjoyed this!

it is a unique topic and you put a new perspective on it. I love how you rhyme, because as you could see from reading my poems i enjoy rhyming too.

I like how it doesnt seem forced, it was just good.

The last line is my favorite.

great job, keep writing!

 
BabyV replied...
Jun. 2, 2010 at 7:13 pm
thanks, i've been getting mixed feelings on this poem, my bestfriend hated this poem. i'll read some of your poems
 
GangstaEyes This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 1, 2010 at 5:30 pm
This IS moving, and I LOOOOOVE the second verse. I don't really think it always needs to rhyme to be good, and this is a prime example of my opinion. Nice.
 
BabyV replied...
Jun. 1, 2010 at 8:21 pm
thank u this was the first rhyming poem i wrote in a looong time
 
josiebelle said...
May 27, 2010 at 3:35 am
Yeh i agree bout hte rhyming in one or two places but you can really sense the meaning behind the words in this!!also you have nice language in there!!
 
just.be.me said...
May 25, 2010 at 5:39 pm
This is so... sad.  Very moving, but I agree some of the rhymes didn't flow and it seemed slightly choppy, the way you broke it up.  Really touching though, it makes you think
 
A_Fate_Unknown said...
May 23, 2010 at 12:27 pm

ah you weren't kidding when u said our writing styles are similar.

I love this although some of the rhymes didn't flow well like worthless with mirthless. But keep it up :P

 
respecturself7 replied...
Jun. 14, 2010 at 9:44 am
This was really good! I know how difficult structured poems can be, really nice job!
 
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