why??

April 20, 2010
By shayna101 SILVER, Carlsbad, California
shayna101 SILVER, Carlsbad, California
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A gust of wind and howling wolves are the sounds I hear

My thoughts are all of peacefulness as are all my cares

I think about that time I told you that I missed you so,
and how I told you that i loved you, felt so long ago

I look above my head to see a black sky filled with stars,

it makes me remember all the times I was with you finding constellations and racing our toy cars

I have grown up a lot since then I would just like you to know

I think about the times we shared and then a cool wind blows

It makes me shiver and makes me quiver I want to go inside

but then I see a light ahead. I think I see a smile.

As the light appears to be getting closer, i kind of want to hide.

My peaceful mind clears its thoughts. now its full of terror I want to scream and run and cry.

I want to disappear. I close my eyes and think of you, hoping there's a way

for me to see you once again if I live past today.

As the person walks slyly forward until were face to face.

I laugh until my cheeks are red. It was you whom I embraced.

You and me we laugh and cry and talk about our lives

when we were young and innocent, when we just loved surprises.

I cry until my heart just bursts, you look almost the same.

Until I see a wedding ring then I go insane.

You get down on one knee and say "will you marry me?"

I think for long time and say no I chose to be free

You look at me confused and mad but your feelings are bottled up inside.

now its you who wants to scream, who wants to run and its you who wants to cry

when you ask me "why?" I say nothing, I just sigh.

"why is the ocean blue, yet when you put it in a glass, why is it so clear?"

"why do fairy tales always have happy endings and why are diamonds so rare?"

"why do butterflies have matching wings and we have matching eyes, how come one's not different than the other? why don't humans fly?"

why do we do anything? why is anything a certain way,

why are some things meant unanswered, like why I do not want to marry you today.



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on Jul. 9 2010 at 9:29 pm
Caitlyn_ilovesoftball GOLD, Douds, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
"Hello Cat-i-lynn Mill-ard-o," -friends
"Stop saying that!! My name ain't Cat-i-lynn Mill-ard-o!!" -Me
"Okay, fine, Hello Cat."-friends
(GRRRRR)
----Also----
"You a turtle on steroids!"-friends
"Hahaha, I know" -ME

Very cool, neat decriptions.  Very well written and exclaimed.  I felt a few words were "slured" together if you know what I mean, they just felt funny.  But otherwise, excellent!!

IvyVine GOLD said...
on Jul. 4 2010 at 9:26 pm
IvyVine GOLD, Unknown, Indiana
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I love how it gives a background first and how all the emotions seem to be almost swirling. Very nice.

on Jul. 4 2010 at 7:44 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

I love this, it's very well-written and well-worded, the questions are my favorite part, they fit so well.

on Jun. 28 2010 at 12:57 pm
--LoveHappens--, Fairfield, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"A friend is someone who knows you, but loves you anyway"

I like the anaphora where you used a bunch of question. It is really well written so great job and I love the ending.... take a look at my work please

on Jun. 27 2010 at 7:55 pm
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Part of the J7X team. :)

I like the series of questions, and how you made it so they made sense with the poem.

The whole poem was good, but my favorite part was the ending. :)


EllieK. BRONZE said...
on Jun. 27 2010 at 6:39 pm
EllieK. BRONZE, Wilmette, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Not all who wander are lost"
JRR Tolkien

"Sometimes life sucks, so suck it up"
-ME

""We succeeded in taking that picture (from deep space), and if you look a it, you see a dot. Thats here. That's home. Thats us. On it, everyone you ever heard of

I LIKED THE ENDING ESPECIALLY, HOW IT WAS SO UNEXPECTED, BUT THE WHOLE THING WAS GREAT. I'M REALLY GLAD I READ THIS!

katie-cat GOLD said...
on Jun. 15 2010 at 1:44 pm
katie-cat GOLD, McClellandtown, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Look after my heart, I've left it with you."- Edward Cullen
"To love another person is to see the face of God . . ."- Les Miserables
"Don't say the old lady screamed. Bring her out and let her scream." - Mark Twain

I liked this a lot.  I enjoyed the ryhming scheme, but, I was a little confused, until the end, about what the poem was about.  At first I thought she was talking about a friend, but I guess it was her lover?  That was the only thing that conused me, it was a little cloudy.  But it was still good, well done.

toflyaway said...
on Jun. 15 2010 at 1:17 am
toflyaway, Melbourne, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"You're Bonkers. But I'll tell you a secret, all the best people are" -Alice In Wonderland (2010)

The ending is terrific, I think those questions are pretty good too, so relatable :)

We-R-3 BRONZE said...
on Jun. 13 2010 at 9:59 pm
We-R-3 BRONZE, Orlando, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
A picture is worth a thousand words, however it takes a real artist to turn words into pictures.

Have you heard about the new Lebron Iphone, you have to set it on vibrate because it doesn't have any rings

You avoided the clich'e well I liked this a lot. BTW I do not know how to do the ' thing over letters that is the reason Cliche looks off.

Kasumi BRONZE said...
on Jun. 13 2010 at 8:37 pm
Kasumi BRONZE, Mequon, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Life can be hard and sad, but there is good things in life, too

I really like how you made this poem so meaningful. I really love this and it was very great! ^^ I think you should keep writing poems!

on May. 7 2010 at 5:33 pm
whatshername GOLD, Carlsbad, California
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wow...this is great...not the traditional happy ending...keep writing! lylas!


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