April 13, 2010
They followed me across the room.
They glinted in the light,
And shone like the moon.
They moved quickly,
Flicking here, and there;
Seeming to look through me,
In a penetrating stare.

My eyes kept low,
I was afraid to look.
However, I'm sure they still read me;
Like an open book.
They looked at me intently,
As if for them I would be a thriller.
There they followed me,
The cold-blooded eyes; of a killer.

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flyingpinkgiraffes This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 19, 2011 at 5:06 pm
Hey don't be so hard on urself..... It's actually pretty dang good. It's very song like. You should try to write lyrics. Ya know, besides skanderlicous :-)
MyConstRuctd_IdentiTy replied...
Nov. 22, 2011 at 3:26 pm
Yeah, I mean, I suppose you're right. But it's hard not to, because the things I write now I think are so much better than this. And it's hard not to look at it and see all the flaws. :P But that's good, though, right? If i see them, I can fix them. :) Hmmm... well, I'm not very good at writing songs, and Skandarlicious was mainly a parody for Em. I don't usually do songs. I'm not ood with them, and the thing for Em was just sort of a little thing on the side. I prefer to keep my focus on noveli... (more »)
Cordelia-13 said...
Jun. 10, 2010 at 3:20 pm
I think I could have done way better. It's ok though. Eh XDD
miracle_of_hope replied...
Aug. 30, 2011 at 7:27 pm
no it resds like a song but sounds a bit paranoid
MyConstRuctd_IdentiTy replied...
Aug. 30, 2011 at 7:44 pm
Yeah, I mean, I didn't spend a whole lot of time on it or anything, so it's probably not the best it could be. It does kinda come across paranoid, though. :) Thanks for reading it.
PussnBoots replied...
Sept. 30, 2011 at 8:55 am
I think it's unique. It does sound paranoid, but that's kind of what makes it cool. :)
MyConstRuctd_IdentiTy replied...
Oct. 1, 2011 at 1:42 pm
Thanks. Although I have to say, it was one of my first pieces, and I've never been good at writing poems or anything, so in my opinion, I think it's the worst of my work on here. :P Probably one of the only poems I've ever written as well. XD
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