Onwards

Passing on, a shooting star –
Dancing ‘cross the sky
Onwards to the land afar
Slipping out a sigh
Rocking back with eyes closed tight
Keeping away the truth
What’s done is done; no need to fight –
What’s lost may just be youth
Easing heartstrings full of tears
Gently letting go
Of memories kept over years
Because of what you know –
Life lives on forever
In the fibers of the soul
Leaving only when they’re severed
From the fibers of the whole
Waving to the star
As it passes ‘cross the sky
Onwards to the land afar
With no clear reason why





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brax34 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 11, 2010 at 11:29 am
I like it a lot, and how it talks about stars (they are really magical and strange to me and i dont know why) but I think it could use a stronger beginning:)
 
becausetheskyisblue This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 14, 2010 at 9:31 pm
thanks for the tips - it's really helpful :)
 
yoDawg said...
May 26, 2010 at 2:47 pm
cool. this's nice
 
smileyfacetwice said...
May 19, 2010 at 2:04 pm

i might cry now :(

this is really good

 
kissyou said...
May 13, 2010 at 8:36 pm
wow, awesome work. this is so meaningful and real
 
immaPCnot said...
May 13, 2010 at 4:46 pm
woah. i literally said "woah" when i read this. fav!
 
strandsofpearl said...
May 12, 2010 at 7:50 pm

ohmygoodness

awesome writing, keep it up (:

 
ashleygirl47 said...
May 12, 2010 at 6:18 pm
i'll quote everyone else here- amazing work; this is so deep!
 
raymondSk8 said...
May 12, 2010 at 6:03 pm
awesome, this is really cool. great writing, keep it up!
 
xoxninaxox said...
May 12, 2010 at 5:11 pm
beautiful! this is so deep, it really gets you thinking. Love it!
 
CherrioGal said...
May 12, 2010 at 2:24 pm
emigawd this is soooo ah-mazingg! its lyk da best! but its kinda saddening ='(  its SO gud tho! i <3 it!
 
aprilshowers said...
May 11, 2010 at 8:45 pm

fantastic!

i love it!

 
innate said...
May 11, 2010 at 2:24 pm

It makes me sad, I want to cry...

"With no clear reason why"

-I like it a lot!

 

 
BritannySunshine said...
May 11, 2010 at 2:22 pm
THIS IS AMAZING!! Seriously, this is the best thing I've ever read. Are you a professional writer or something? Cause if not you totally could be. Great work, I'm dying to read more!
 
coolcat said...
May 11, 2010 at 2:22 pm
Loved it. It was ACE
 
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