Brother

April 9, 2010
By Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
11 articles 1 photo 307 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."


He was standing at the edge when I found him,
Looking out onto the city.
I walked up and he heard me approach.
He turned ‘round, saying “isn’t it pretty?”

I nodded my head and slowly I said
“What’re you thinking ‘bout, bro?”
He scuffed ‘round the sand with the toe of his shoe
And said “I don’t know, sis. I don’t know.”

Now, I’d always known my big brother was bad
His sad mind would get in a rut
He’d say some bad things and he’d do some bad things
Bad stuff about I don’t know what.

But I’d also known that my brother was sad
I’d do little things, try and cheer him
I’d go in his room and I’d give him a hug
Even when no one else would go near him.

I think what he did next had been stalled and put off
Like an appointment that keeps getting bumped-
He told me he loves me, he gave a wry smile
Looked out over the cliff-
And he jumped.



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amaranth178 said...
on Jul. 1 2010 at 11:06 pm
amaranth178, Washington, District Of Columbia
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A wry smile.....ah...bittersweeeet. Wow. Complex thoughts. Great job!

Eilatan GOLD said...
on Jun. 6 2010 at 12:28 pm
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
11 articles 1 photo 307 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."

thank you! I remember talking to you on the comments for 'one man, one woman'. your work is very well done too, thanks for taking the time to comment!

AbbyQ PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 6 2010 at 2:45 am
AbbyQ PLATINUM, Fairbanks, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
"When the coroner cuts me open, he will find ink in my veins and blood on my typewriter keys."

I AM crying. Wow. How do you write so powerfully? This is absolutely amazing. My heart stopped, too. Fantastic work.

on May. 23 2010 at 12:08 pm
Karma_Chameleon SILVER, English, Indiana
8 articles 0 photos 236 comments

Favorite Quote:
To be able to say "I love you" one must first be able to say "I" - Ayn Rand

This is really interesting; your writing style is incredibly original and refreshing, and I enjoyed how poetry tells a story more clearly than most imagery. Very nice!

Eilatan GOLD said...
on May. 18 2010 at 7:10 pm
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
11 articles 1 photo 307 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."

thank you! I'll be sure to check out your work as well.

on May. 18 2010 at 6:45 pm
faypirate23 DIAMOND, Fayetteville, West Virginia
61 articles 0 photos 103 comments

Favorite Quote:
Take the road less traveled by.

this is rlly gud i like ur stuff ;)

Eilatan GOLD said...
on May. 17 2010 at 7:38 pm
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
11 articles 1 photo 307 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."

Thank you so much! I means so much to me that my poem means something to someone out there in the world. I've read some of your work, too- you're very talented. thanks again!

on May. 16 2010 at 5:26 pm
sydney_hope GOLD, Round Rock, Texas
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The end made my heart stop for a moment. No joke. This is absolutely amazing, it's almost making me cry. I absolutely loved this, it's amazing. I loved the first stanza, it's beautiful. I want to read this over and over again... I'm hanging it in my room. I love it.


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