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Peanut Butter Cup

One bite and I’m gone
Eager teeth sink slowly
Like hikers in quick sand
With every second
The become more engulfed
Until they are beyond help

One bite and I’m gone
Beyond knee deep in this
Licking flavor-encrusted lips
As I viciously tear at wrappers
That refuses to open in time
And scratch at the content
Like a starving lioness at prey

One bite and I’m gone
The sweet taste possesses my mind
I am an addicted junkie
Wanting nothing more
Thank the irreplaceable sensation
There is no rehab for me
I’m already gone



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a_grumpy_moomin said...
May 17, 2010 at 2:57 pm
love this!
 
Kandabear said...
May 17, 2010 at 10:13 am
Well I admit the title to the piece and the actually piece made me laugh. I love it. Great work. "The sweet taste possesses my mind" is my favorite line
 
AngelLOLZ replied...
May 17, 2010 at 2:18 pm
i like this one. its interesting and has a lot of details. keep up the good work
 
sNIKerz said...
May 16, 2010 at 11:43 am
This was wonderful. Something about it made me think WOW... I dont know how to explain it.. it was great!!
 
AvengedJasonFold said...
May 13, 2010 at 8:18 pm
This has got to be one of the most interesting metaphors I have ever seen.... assuming I interpreted your poem correctly haha! Either way, I love it. It's really really cool.
 
--LoveHappens-- said...
May 13, 2010 at 2:31 pm
I really like this I thought it was really descriptive and you took such a simple thing and wrote about it perfectly. Great job take a look at some of my other work!!!
 
jonas_chic899 said...
May 13, 2010 at 10:55 am
hah sweet:DD
 
bethmoftw. said...
May 13, 2010 at 9:20 am

oh man, i want one. ;p

but this is good, and i like it. because some people right about being addicted and a junkie towards drugs and stuff, but this is about a yummy delicious peanut butter cup. (: nomnomnomm.

lol any who, it's good.

 
Ridersblock said...
May 12, 2010 at 11:33 am
very entertaining!  I may just go buy one...
 
TaKeN_FoR_LiFe_42410 said...
May 10, 2010 at 2:53 pm
this is really good, it makes me want to go and buy me one! :}
 
Tyjo95 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 9, 2010 at 4:06 pm
I like this, not because I like peanut butter, but because it can be a metaphor for something a lot deeper.  Good work!
 
flyweelThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 6, 2010 at 5:14 pm
I found this kinda funny. The way you turned something so simple into something so poetic. I happen to adore peanut butter! Great job!
 
hyp0allergenic replied...
May 7, 2010 at 6:58 pm

Haha, I'm allergic to peanuts, so I now know what I'm missing out on. ;)

Entertaining, really created a picture in my mind, haha. Good. :)

 
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