Egg with tears

April 6, 2010
By Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
11 articles 1 photo 307 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."


I ate a hard-boiled egg this morning
Took an hour and a half to dye-
The most beautiful, six-color stained glass shell
So hard to crack, was it a sign?
Took the egg into lunch yesterday to show my friends
But they don’t love me, so what would they care?
They looked at my egg for a second and then looked away
I couldn’t eat it for lunch, I was too attached.

I ate a hard-boiled egg this morning
Took an hour and a half to dye
Two days to get attached to
And one minute to eat up with salt.

So now the beautiful stained-glass shell lies broken
Into flakes and pieces on my plate
Just like my heart.



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on Jul. 6 2010 at 11:57 am
MayaElyashiv PLATINUM, Ramat Hasharon, Other
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Ah, this poem really annoys me! Not because of the message/story/idea, which I love! But because of the last line our of every four. It felt to me while reading that the first three lines would fit together perfectly and then the fourth would jar everything out of place.

 

You may have meant that to happen, and if you did, it's a genius way to make the poem feel broken. However, if you didn't, it takes away from the story of the poem.

 

Let me know if you were aware of those fourth lines, I'm interested to find out.  


amaranth178 said...
on Jul. 1 2010 at 11:14 pm
amaranth178, Washington, District Of Columbia
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The 'randomness' is part of the intrigue, I think. I liked this poem as well, mainly because of the way you portrayed the dominant emotion--through a colorful hard-boiled egg. Creative :)

AbbyQ PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 6 2010 at 2:42 am
AbbyQ PLATINUM, Fairbanks, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
"When the coroner cuts me open, he will find ink in my veins and blood on my typewriter keys."

I love this! Love it love it love it! Nicely done.

Eilatan GOLD said...
on May. 4 2010 at 5:24 pm
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
11 articles 1 photo 307 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."

Yeah, the crushing of the egg is supposed to symbolize the crushing of the heart. I can see how it must have seemed random at the beginning. :-)

Thank you for commenting!


on May. 4 2010 at 10:09 am
PrincessBethyyy GOLD, Knoxville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"Being happy doesn't mean everythings perfect, it means looking past the imperfections in life." -Gerard Way.

At first I was reading this and thought "Why is this person writing about a hard boiled egg? ..Odd" Yeah, well then I finished it and realize what you're getting at with the crushing of the heart and crushing of the egg! At least I think... But good poem either way. =]

Eilatan GOLD said...
on May. 3 2010 at 5:41 am
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
11 articles 1 photo 307 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."

Thank you so much for commenting!

on May. 2 2010 at 8:39 am
IsobelFree DIAMOND, Hamilton, Other
71 articles 20 photos 298 comments

Favorite Quote:
"As long as there is open road, the familiar has the most formidable competitor." - Anonymous

I really love this. The emotion really shows through - great job.


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