Victim

March 22, 2010
By Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)


Hidden in the darkness
Heart as cold as ice
Waiting for a hero
Everything has its price

Rejected by society
Victim of their hate
Far beyond their mercy
Kindness comes too late



Similar Articles

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 32 comments.


mee-mee SILVER said...
on Sep. 8 2011 at 12:35 pm
mee-mee SILVER, Orlando, Florida
6 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"we all have dreams. but always remember with that dream comes a star. trust in yourself, believe in who you are. with nothing but confidence you will go far."
-mee-mee hoskins






quote written by:mee mee hoskins

woah ! i really love this poem . its short and straight to the point .

keep writing this is your gift .


on Oct. 21 2010 at 10:07 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

THANK YOU!!:)

on Oct. 18 2010 at 9:40 pm
kmarie14 PLATINUM, Hyrum, Utah
22 articles 5 photos 246 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is either an adventure...or nothing" -Helen Keller

its crazy how beautiful your writing is....you turn words into raw emotions...amazing:) love it!

on Sep. 19 2010 at 11:40 pm
SamiLynn PLATINUM, Anthem, Arizona
20 articles 9 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The unexamined life is not worth living." ~Socrates

brief and powerful. i like it!

on Sep. 17 2010 at 9:59 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

Thank you Kal:)

-Kal- GOLD said...
on Sep. 17 2010 at 9:46 pm
-Kal- GOLD, Carthage, North Carolina
14 articles 0 photos 244 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Faith sees the invisible, believes the incredible, and recieves the impossible"
-Anonymous

This is very well written and has an excellent rythm. You cut it off at the perfect time too cause much longer and it would've ruined the effect. Great job!

on Sep. 6 2010 at 2:50 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

Its one of my rough drafts I can't even remember why I wrote it but thank you

Amiee said...
on Sep. 5 2010 at 4:19 am
wow, cool!

BrokenPuppet said...
on Sep. 4 2010 at 10:48 am
BrokenPuppet, Romeo, Michigan
0 articles 0 photos 13 comments

This is short but it gets it's point across. It is well written.

The only thing I would suggest is that you pack more emotion into your words. This poem should be giving off pain...but it was only some words that tried to take the shape of pain.

But...I think this is a good poem. A REALLY good poem. It just needs more emotion. :) Good job


on Sep. 4 2010 at 10:40 am
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

Lol its ok one of my best friends lives in Korea thanks for the comments:)

Amiee said...
on Sep. 4 2010 at 1:51 am
oh shoot, i forgot this was an english site and wrote korean, really sorry!

Amiee said...
on Sep. 4 2010 at 1:49 am

I LOVE THIS! this is just the style of writing i love! it doesn't excatly have the subject in the poem but instead makes the person think about it, and it's sooo descriptive!

5 of 5! 오점만점에오점!


on Aug. 31 2010 at 10:35 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

:)                           

on Aug. 31 2010 at 10:34 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

Thank you Zavery and no problem you're a good writer:)

on Aug. 28 2010 at 9:17 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

you're welcome captain. your black holes are much appreciated as well.

_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 10:01 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.


–Golly (Harriet The Spy)

Amazing. I love your style of expression. Very affective! Thanks for commenting on my work.   =)

on Aug. 25 2010 at 9:24 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

THANK YOU!!!!!! youre comments are appreciated:)

on Aug. 23 2010 at 10:36 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

i lovwe these 8 lines of awesomenss. and i love the tragic/you came too late /I'm gonna die feeling. do your dance captain.

on Aug. 13 2010 at 8:34 am
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

Thanx Riley:)

riley... GOLD said...
on Aug. 10 2010 at 1:37 pm
riley... GOLD, Yakima, Washington
13 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"i became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity." edgar allen poe.

wow, so deep. the main question running through my head after i read it was, "how old is this author??" because it is so deep and real and true. it seems like so much experience is poured out in two stanzas.


Parkland Book