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Sore Throat

Days go by,
without any words.

Months go by,
as my throat still burns.

Missing you as much as I do,
I let you slip through my fingers.

Achy, bloody pain in my throat
I try to stop my words from scuttling away
from my tongue.

Close enough to touch,
far enough to yell
not close enough to hear,
my own personal hell.





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musicispassion said...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 11:05 pm
my fav from u love it i think the title goes woth it perfectly i really like the picture do u know what it is?
 
silver_ice said...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 7:24 pm
ooo this is my fav of yours so far! keep it up!!
 
Eirias said...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 12:04 pm

Maybe stanza 2: add a dash after "by" and take out "as."

Stanza 4: I don't think you need that last line.  I'd add punctuation after "bloody" (maybe  a colon). I don't think "scuttling" fits.

 

I like the last stanza! But maybe puntuation on line 2?

 
Raytheraym said...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 9:33 pm
This is really good! I like the last stanza a lot!
 
FreedomIsMyVirtue said...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 7:55 pm
It's like A Millin Miles Away by Rihanna and I love this! I just do! :)))
 
betweenyouandi replied...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 8:06 pm
I've never heard that song before! But thank you, I will be sure to look it up and see the resemblence :)!
 
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