Sore Throat

March 22, 2010
By callmebaddog SILVER, Spokane, Washington
callmebaddog SILVER, Spokane, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you'll live forever. Live as if you'll die today.
-James Dean


Days go by,
without any words.

Months go by,
as my throat still burns.

Missing you as much as I do,
I let you slip through my fingers.

Achy, bloody pain in my throat
I try to stop my words from scuttling away
from my tongue.

Close enough to touch,
far enough to yell
not close enough to hear,
my own personal hell.



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on Aug. 5 2011 at 11:05 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
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Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

my fav from u love it i think the title goes woth it perfectly i really like the picture do u know what it is?

on Aug. 3 2011 at 7:24 pm
silver_ice BRONZE, Wheelock, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Imagination is the eye of the soul.
-Joseph Joubert
and
Clothes make the man. Naked people have little or no influence on society.
-Mark Twain ;P

ooo this is my fav of yours so far! keep it up!!

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on Aug. 3 2011 at 12:04 pm
Eirias SILVER, Spring, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you wish to be a writer, write" -Epictetus

Maybe stanza 2: add a dash after "by" and take out "as."

Stanza 4: I don't think you need that last line.  I'd add punctuation after "bloody" (maybe  a colon). I don't think "scuttling" fits.

 

I like the last stanza! But maybe puntuation on line 2?


on Aug. 2 2011 at 9:33 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
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This is really good! I like the last stanza a lot!

on Aug. 2 2011 at 8:06 pm
callmebaddog SILVER, Spokane, Washington
8 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you'll live forever. Live as if you'll die today.
-James Dean

I've never heard that song before! But thank you, I will be sure to look it up and see the resemblence :)!

on Aug. 2 2011 at 7:55 pm
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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Favorite Quote:
‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

It's like A Millin Miles Away by Rihanna and I love this! I just do! :)))


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