love sucks

March 15, 2010
By XXXXXShIaNeNeIsMeXXXXX SILVER, Rio Rancho, New Mexico
XXXXXShIaNeNeIsMeXXXXX SILVER, Rio Rancho, New Mexico
5 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"love is complicated but wonderful"


You told me you loved me then broke me
while my heart was getting put back you madeit fall
i thought you loved me like you used to but i was wrong
"im sorry but we cant be together" were you lastwords love sucks but we have ti go through it <3


The author's comments:
I wrote this because my boyfriend left me for a girl he didn't know. I hope girls will understand that they will get there heart broken but they have to stay strong

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on Sep. 13 2010 at 7:51 pm
ForeverFelix PLATINUM, Catasauqua, Pennsylvania
30 articles 2 photos 207 comments

Favorite Quote:
Daydreams can be worse than nightmares, but that never stops me.

I agree with boosflash, but it was not bad, however it would be better if you added a little more substance and a little something...different, you know? Keep writing! =)

on Jul. 30 2010 at 7:38 pm
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
7 articles 0 photos 431 comments

Favorite Quote:
Part of the J7X team. :)

This is so true, especially the last two lines. And I agree with your side comment.

on Jul. 30 2010 at 7:29 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

I liked this. I agree you could have stated it a bit better, but it was still a good poem, pretty good flow, I like the message.  Good job.

on Jul. 30 2010 at 7:28 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1985 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

the ending line's so true...good workk

on May. 7 2010 at 9:26 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

you said comment on your work so here goes the monkey---this sounds like alot of other stuff i've read on teeink-"you said you loved me but you didnt you broke my heart and now i'm hurt. but we have to go through it".-not very poetic. sob stories-not poetry. you need a creative way to portray your emotions in a poetic form so the reader doesnt go-"just another sob story". my humble honest fluffy opinion.




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