Floating This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

She was a jigsaw puzzle from the start
every piece had to be understood.
Had to be
patiently, meticulously,
painstakingly
put together
to see her for her complete beauty

She was a kaleidoscope,
every angle revealed
a different
equally colorful, dazzling
beautiful collage.

Her lips touching mine
forced me every time
to reject the notion that clouds are just
random collections of water
suspended in the atmosphere
but rather super fluffy pillows invented by a benevolent creator for love-drunk boys

to float blissfully through
like over-stuffed balloons.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.






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TheContentedWanderer94 said...
Feb. 7, 2011 at 7:12 pm
I love this! So descriptive! Keep Writing!!
 
love_and_anatomy said...
Feb. 7, 2011 at 11:05 am

pretty vivid poem;

Kudossss!

 
kaitlyng13 said...
Feb. 7, 2011 at 7:36 am
This is an amazing poem, love it.
 
Lt13th replied...
Feb. 7, 2011 at 9:20 am
this poem really touch my heart its true girls r like puzzles if u figure them out ur bound 2 learn more 
 
HisPurePrincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 6, 2011 at 10:55 pm
wow, this is really cool.  and beautiful, in a rainbowy sort of way.
 
cherrios33 replied...
Feb. 7, 2011 at 12:42 am

What a GREAT adjective!:D

"rainbowy"...haha i love it.

 
Lt13th replied...
Feb. 7, 2011 at 9:22 am

its interesting i like it

 

 
HisPurePrincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 7, 2011 at 11:25 am
yeah, it needs to be added to the dictionary.  i think i added it to my Word's dictionary.
 
Ehwaz11 said...
Feb. 5, 2011 at 8:47 am

This is a great poem-it tells a beautiful story, and I love the line, "But rather super fluffy pillows invented by a benevolent creator for love-drunk boys to float blissfully through"

it creates a great picture of feeling

 
shreya756 said...
Feb. 5, 2011 at 7:54 am
I love the last line of the second last stanza. Really nice :)
 
emoducks said...
Feb. 4, 2011 at 1:45 pm
This has a lot of long words, but I liked it :)
 
WeLiveForScars This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 3, 2011 at 4:07 pm

I love this.

 

 
nicia said...
Feb. 3, 2011 at 12:22 pm
cut ecute cute
 
Natherine said...
Apr. 9, 2010 at 5:44 pm

I LOVE IT!! 

 

HOPE  CAN CHEK MINE OUTT 

 
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