Haziness

March 9, 2010
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As we drive unexpectedly
As we strive strongly, gently
Find what was lost with this adventure
Talk out the fears with every puncture

Blind like wind and rain
Darkness the stain
On your heart
The pieces come apart

Look out wish
See the colorful fish
Like an ocean rainbow in the sky
This haziness makes you wonder why

Words pouring out on empty pages
You journey through dreams in these ages
Trying to get away from all the pain
As we drive in the rain

Blindly on an adventure
My heart beat races with every puncture
Like an ocean rainbow in the sky
This haziness makes me wonder why





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Sultana said...
May 15, 2010 at 10:29 pm
I agree with MayaElyashiv on this one, too. However, I felt like I was trying to find my way through a downpour of a storm in the darkness. I liked this a lot!
 
HeronHero replied...
May 15, 2010 at 11:01 pm
Yea Maya leaves great comments!:)That's cool though, I'm happy that it had an effect on you too!!!Thanks for commenting!!!:)I really appreciate it!:)
 
MayaElyashiv This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 2, 2010 at 1:55 am
I love how hazy this is...reading it made me feel like I was walking through a fog or a mist (in a good way)! 
 
HeronHero replied...
May 2, 2010 at 11:26 am

Thanks!I'm so glad you like it!:)

Is there anything, you think I could make better?!

 
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