Twisted Fate

March 9, 2010
By teenbookworm14 PLATINUM, Plainfield, Connecticut
teenbookworm14 PLATINUM, Plainfield, Connecticut
41 articles 0 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing gold can stay" -Robert Frost


all it takes is a smile from his twisted lips,
a walk from his clumsy legs,
to make me fall in love again.
he knows nothing,
i know everything.
he sees, needs, breathes his own life without knowledge of it
while i hope, want, cry to be in it every moment
if it takes away my knowledge too,
then so let it be,
and if it takes away my life too,
then so let it be,
for while i walk blindfolded in the cold forest,
shattering winds whispering secrets around me,
earthen creatures crawling through the night,
trees guarding against intruders to enter their world,
i take off the blindfold,
and he's there, he sees me,
but all he can do is watch,
as i am taken by the trees, the earthen creatures, the shattering winds
he looks on, but hears a gentle voice calling to him,
she knows he can hear her now,
and so she speaks her final words,
are they needed? will he care now?
he waits in patience for those words,
but the girl stops calling,
i love you, she whispers to herself as he walks away,
dazed beyond confusion


The author's comments:
Love can be inspiration if you put it too good use, it's not just an emotion, nor is life.

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on Jul. 26 2010 at 1:28 am
teenbookworm14 PLATINUM, Plainfield, Connecticut
41 articles 0 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing gold can stay" -Robert Frost

thank you so much for commenting! i have a question, what do you mean by it 'lacks emotion'? please build on that so i can change it next time and become a better writer :) thanks again

on Jul. 24 2010 at 8:37 am
Pitiful_Anonymous PLATINUM, New Cumberland, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"and all you f***ers go beep beep beep in cheap,plastic cars. If It's to dumb to see or say you'll still sing it, and I'll just cue the applause" - Marilyn Manson

This is pretty good. I like the way you set it up and described everything. It kind of lacks the emotion tat i was hoping for at the start, but it's still a good job! I wouldn't stop if i were you haha

on Jul. 11 2010 at 11:24 pm
teenbookworm14 PLATINUM, Plainfield, Connecticut
41 articles 0 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing gold can stay" -Robert Frost

no problem :) really??? i LOVE house. i don't know, it's kinda iffy, we'll just have to watch and find out! lol

on Jul. 11 2010 at 3:49 pm
smilebright BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
"Your only in trouble if you get caught"- Aladdin

Thank you for commenting on my poems! And i also watch house c.s.i and gossip girl. Do you think chucks going to make it on gossip girl? I hope he dose. And sorry to the rest of the people reading this comment

on Jul. 11 2010 at 12:44 am
teenbookworm14 PLATINUM, Plainfield, Connecticut
41 articles 0 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing gold can stay" -Robert Frost

thanks! :)

on Jul. 11 2010 at 12:43 am
teenbookworm14 PLATINUM, Plainfield, Connecticut
41 articles 0 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing gold can stay" -Robert Frost

you like sara dessen??? omg awesome! yeah sure, i was going to anyways since you were nice enough to comment on my poem :)

on Jul. 10 2010 at 5:27 pm
smilebright BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
1 article 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Your only in trouble if you get caught"- Aladdin

Agreed. you have some serious talent. Also i was just looking at your profile we both like sara dessen. please post comments on my poems

on Jul. 10 2010 at 8:13 am
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

oh gosh :O thats deep- the poem and the description thing. i loved ur word choice too :))




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