Dear Beautiful Eyes

March 12, 2010
By eyeplaybass BRONZE, West Chicago, Illinois
eyeplaybass BRONZE, West Chicago, Illinois
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Beautiful eyes can you see me now?
And if you could what would you think?
Would you turn your back and say that I stink?
And would you know who I was anymore?

Because dear beautiful eyes, you knew me once before.
And I knew you… Or did I?
Yes, no, yes, no, yes, no…
I don’t know.

I long for your touch
Your voice
Your smell
Your embrace
Oh, I remember it well

You used to smile at me
when we were young…
But there was a tear in you
when your family took you away,
To live a thousand miles thata way.

So, dear beautiful eyes if you saw me now,
would you recognize me somehow?
Or would we both just be another face in the crowd…
But I know that’s not true,
Because you’re more than just eyes,
You’re a person too.



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archery10 said...
on Mar. 28 2010 at 5:15 pm
nice poem, but make it a freeverse and get rid of the words that rhyme

on Mar. 27 2010 at 6:09 pm
OliviaEllisonStewart SILVER, Defiance, Ohio
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"The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return" -Moulin Rouge

I like the idea. Its a cute poem, but try not to focus so much on trying to rhyme the words. if its a free verse, you can substitute a word that may be mediocre but rhyme for something elaborate that makes the poem.... idk pop. just a suggestion. but still very good.




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