Whisper

March 10, 2010
By thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
67 articles 0 photos 336 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."


It’s been taken away
Like a whisper in the wind.
Drifting among the trees
Until slowly fading into the distance
Not there anymore
As if it never was, never will.
Disappearing in the darkness
Eaten up by the silence
Dissolved into the earth
Never to return
Never to speak
Never to live
Fight for what is right
For what numbs the pain
As we thrust our swords
And clink our knives
We, too fade in the distance
As we all
End up the same.


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ilikepink said...
on May. 24 2010 at 5:49 pm
i luv the last line! it creates so much intrigue :-)

mj<3er said...
on May. 24 2010 at 5:48 pm
ahhh so good! i love your work (:

on Apr. 13 2010 at 10:46 am
HunterGirl_58 GOLD, Los Lunas, New Mexico
11 articles 1 photo 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If this is what it takes to get there. . . . then BRING ON THE PAIN!!!"

Well, first off I want to thank you for your comment on my work. But htis is truly great!!! My fav. lines are "Never to return, Never to speak, Never to live." AMAZING!!!! =D

jill456 said...
on Apr. 12 2010 at 10:29 pm
this one left me speechless. i am not entirely sure what to make of it because your thoughts and emotions are so deep. what i do know is that it's good. really good

on Apr. 12 2010 at 7:59 pm
SarClark BRONZE, NC, Connecticut
2 articles 0 photos 534 comments

WOW! this is great! I love ur sn, btw :)

I love the way you broke the sentences, as you can see I do that too. Amazing job, i totally agree with Fallen!!! Perrrfect


on Apr. 1 2010 at 4:47 pm
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
67 articles 0 photos 336 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

Thanks for your review. I'm trying to get more submitted; I guess Teen Ink is thoroughly looking through the submissions. For the time being, you can check out some of my other work.

_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Apr. 1 2010 at 4:42 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.


–Golly (Harriet The Spy)

Yeah, can you plz post more work????

on Apr. 1 2010 at 8:06 am
Raise_Up PLATINUM, Tomball, Texas
21 articles 0 photos 103 comments

Favorite Quote:
When i think of you, i end up falling alseep and i dream of you.<-- i wrote that quote
There isnt like looking into your eyes and knowing you will always be there to protect me <3 MADE BY ME ^^i wrote these quotes

thats really good, keep up on the writing

i would love to hear more from you


PrezLover101 said...
on Mar. 30 2010 at 6:45 pm
This poem i really like :) its great!

Jan-o Wizard said...
on Mar. 28 2010 at 7:22 pm
Quite thought-provoking! I think this would be a wonderful exercise for a creative writing class. Remove the title, and ask people what they imagine you had in mind when you wrote it.


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