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It’s been taken away
Like a whisper in the wind.
Drifting among the trees
Until slowly fading into the distance
Not there anymore
As if it never was, never will.
Disappearing in the darkness
Eaten up by the silence
Dissolved into the earth
Never to return
Never to speak
Never to live
Fight for what is right
For what numbs the pain
As we thrust our swords
And clink our knives
We, too fade in the distance
As we all
End up the same.





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ilikepink said...
May 24, 2010 at 5:49 pm
i luv the last line! it creates so much intrigue :-)
 
mj<3er said...
May 24, 2010 at 5:48 pm
ahhh so good! i love your work (:
 
Bummble_Be3 said...
Apr. 13, 2010 at 10:46 am
Well, first off I want to thank you for your comment on my work. But htis is truly great!!! My fav. lines are "Never to return, Never to speak, Never to live." AMAZING!!!! =D
 
jill456 said...
Apr. 12, 2010 at 10:29 pm
this one left me speechless. i am not entirely sure what to make of it because your thoughts and emotions are so deep. what i do know is that it's good. really good
 
Laughternchoclate said...
Apr. 12, 2010 at 7:59 pm

WOW! this is great! I love ur sn, btw :)

I love the way you broke the sentences, as you can see I do that too. Amazing job, i totally agree with Fallen!!! Perrrfect

 
Fallen55 said...
Apr. 1, 2010 at 8:06 am

thats really good, keep up on the writing

i would love to hear more from you

 
ZAVERY replied...
Apr. 1, 2010 at 4:42 pm
Yeah, can you plz post more work????
 
thewriteidea This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Apr. 1, 2010 at 4:47 pm
Thanks for your review. I'm trying to get more submitted; I guess Teen Ink is thoroughly looking through the submissions. For the time being, you can check out some of my other work.
 
PrezLover101 said...
Mar. 30, 2010 at 6:45 pm
This poem i really like :) its great!
 
Jan-o Wizard said...
Mar. 28, 2010 at 7:22 pm
Quite thought-provoking! I think this would be a wonderful exercise for a creative writing class. Remove the title, and ask people what they imagine you had in mind when you wrote it.
 
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