The Velvet

By , Pleasanton, CA
White specs, white ruffles,
ripple through the water.

Water is velvet,
blue as night.

Night is not dark,
sun has set,
but sky still dusk
as we drift by the sea.

Waves come from,
the big ship.
Lumps of ocean,
swim through
the ruffles,
the dusk,
The velvet.





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sandylmiller said...
May 24, 2010 at 5:34 pm
what an image you create! this is one of my favorites. i agree with all the comments below. genius!
 
kitkat said...
May 24, 2010 at 5:33 pm
writen like a TRUE poet!!!
 
softballgurl said...
May 24, 2010 at 5:32 pm
i love the ending, the way you end it with all the aspects you addressed in the poem. brilliantly written!
 
mygirl said...
May 24, 2010 at 5:31 pm
you have such beautiful metaphors. i love the comparison, and the way you end it with the title :)
 
jill456 said...
Apr. 13, 2010 at 7:49 pm
this is really descriptive!! i could see the scene in front of me. very nice visuals. great job!!
 
PrezLover101 said...
Mar. 30, 2010 at 6:46 pm
What was running through your head when you wrote this? I'd love to know the story behind it! :)
 
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