I Failed You

March 4, 2010
You walked on that deserted road
Blurred memories of us on replay
You left with no second thoughts
You stepped upon the forgotten bridge
And left your last breath
Not only did you leave the world behind
You left me
You won't be easily forgotten
Especially when you were loved by me
We strode through the worst
Achieving the best
But what comes to mind first
Is that i possibly failed you
You jumped
I wasn't there to catch you
When i have forgiven myself
I will agree to let you go
I Look upward among the clouds
Knowing your up there
I am down here
I will see you again
But for now
My friend

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iliketac0s said...
Apr. 9, 2010 at 2:40 pm
loved this! sad, loved the line "i wasn't there to catch you". good job.
Quotes_on_Notebooks said...
Apr. 7, 2010 at 11:24 am
this is a really moving piece. i loved the line "you stepped upon the forgotten bridge and left you last breath." that was a really, really haunting line.
lunaEccentric said...
Mar. 28, 2010 at 6:21 pm

Loved it!

My favorite line was"You jumped/ I wasn't there to catch you"

Loved the rhythm, but in some parts you don't seem sure of your writing. I know the message of the piece lends itself towards insecurity, but in the line "Is that I possibly failed you" possibly could be taken out, it detracts from the message. i love the first stanza and the last lines. Keep it up!


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