Without You

March 4, 2010
The days keep passing by.
And there's not a moment when I don't think of you.
I think I died,
when you said that we were through.
You made my life worth living.
But since we're over,
I'm back to drinking and driving.
The rain is pouring down,
faster and faster.
I'm falling around,
what a stupid disaster.
My heart still thinks there's a way out,
but my mind knows it's over.
I'm trying to shout;
why couldn't I be sober?
All of a sudden I'm lying on your lawn.
I look up to see you staring down at me.
You tell me I can make it, it's almost dawn,
But it's too late,
I've been set free.

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Smile,Iloveyou said...
Aug. 28, 2010 at 10:29 am
i love it!! 
awriterslife replied...
Aug. 29, 2010 at 12:32 am
thank you!! :)
xxjasmineibxx said...
Aug. 25, 2010 at 8:29 am
This is amazing! You really have a lot of talent. Keep writing!
awriterslife replied...
Aug. 29, 2010 at 12:32 am
thank you so much! :)
Chrome_Clouds This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 4, 2010 at 6:56 am
I love the end to the poem; it just kind of hits you, but it almost seems a little emotionless toward the beginning.  KEEP WRITING
writerx14 replied...
Aug. 5, 2010 at 3:10 am
thanks so much for your comment and your advice! ill remember it!
Pitiful_Anonymous said...
Jul. 24, 2010 at 8:39 am

This is great! you really did good with this one, very emotional and real, i like!

Keep writing stuff like this, and sweetheart, you will be livin the life of the rich and famous haha :)

writer_girlx14 replied...
Jul. 26, 2010 at 1:26 am
thank you so much! i definitely will keep writing, and yeah, that'll be the day, haha ;)
Teardrops said...
Jul. 11, 2010 at 3:54 pm
You have talent. I'd like to see some of your other work. keep posting!
country_girlx14 replied...
Jul. 11, 2010 at 11:26 pm
thanks! :) i will don't worry, i actually just sent the editors 8 new poems but they're 'pending approval' so they should be up in a few days
Teardrops replied...
Jul. 12, 2010 at 10:21 am
It sucks how long it take to gat a poem approved. i also have work waiting
writer_girlx14 replied...
Jul. 26, 2010 at 1:27 am
i know! i posted those 8 poems about 3 weeks ago and they're still not submitted!
bettr.that.ya.didnt.kno said...
Jul. 10, 2010 at 8:09 am
whoa. there was SOO much meaning in this. that was brilliant. good job :)
country_girlx14 replied...
Jul. 11, 2010 at 11:26 pm
thanks x 10!!!! :D
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