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Simply Uncomfortable MAG

May 13, 2008
By Anonymous

Simply (like
opening a new six-colored
pack of sidewalk chalk,
scrawling childlike innocence
onto driveways and sidewalks,
like the sun shining on Sundays,
like everything turning out exactly
how we had hoped and planned,
like you and me when we were at our best).
Uncomfortable (like
your knees after pressing them against
the pavement for too long,
footprints smearing our art,
like too many colors and not enough
talent to use them all,
like how reality is always screwing us
and never helping us,
like you,
and me,
exactly as we are
right now).



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KylieK GOLD said...
on Jan. 15 2013 at 10:32 pm
KylieK GOLD, Mt. Washington, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"To love is to surpass one's self."

I second this comment: Incredible structure, phenominal detail. Love it all the way around.   I look forward to reading more from you.

quaqua12 said...
on Dec. 9 2008 at 3:01 am
This was an really good poem. It basically tells everything.

Kaitee Cross said...
on Dec. 8 2008 at 10:17 pm
Wow. I really liked the way you just put it into like, 2 sentences.

It's such a deep poem but to someone who who doesn't read it, it would just seem like you're writing about playing with chalk.

:)



Kaitee C

Mrs. M

Clarksville, TN

DMangino said...
on Dec. 8 2008 at 9:38 pm
I loved it!

the candyman said...
on Dec. 8 2008 at 6:48 pm
this. is. absolutely. awesome. no joke.

selina21 said...
on Dec. 8 2008 at 4:53 pm
it was a great poem!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :)

wondergrl95 said...
on Dec. 8 2008 at 3:49 pm
wow, very passionate, that is exactly why i love poetry because.

Mvpla15 said...
on Nov. 22 2008 at 3:44 pm
i think that ur poem is really good. it doesnt just state the bad like most do but also some good

Kaotic Drake said...
on Nov. 22 2008 at 1:23 pm
You continue to amaze me.

tweedle dee said...
on Nov. 10 2008 at 11:33 pm
beautiful... simply beautiful. everything put into a single thought. i think you should deffinatly keep writting and i honestly think you have a chance at being really well known i hope you do because this is just so incredible.

pachydermia said...
on Nov. 4 2008 at 12:33 pm
This is gorgeous. I love the structure of it- like packing everything you have to say in one moment and doing it effortlessly. Great job.