Thirst

February 28, 2010
By B.Mack SILVER, Albuquerque, New Mexico
B.Mack SILVER, Albuquerque, New Mexico
8 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Yes, we can"


The darkness covers up
a part of her eyes

Her hair flows down
like a dead tree
crying for water


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B.Mack SILVER said...
on Jun. 20 2011 at 7:19 pm
B.Mack SILVER, Albuquerque, New Mexico
8 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Yes, we can"

thanks.keep writing

B.Mack SILVER said...
on Jun. 20 2011 at 7:16 pm
B.Mack SILVER, Albuquerque, New Mexico
8 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Yes, we can"

thanks, i like your work too. keep it up sorry i comment so late

on Apr. 29 2010 at 9:51 am
Jade-McKaye SILVER, West Jordan, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
what happened to a dream?

i love how you can say so much in such a small amount of words, this is really good.

on Apr. 26 2010 at 2:54 pm
kissingdarkness SILVER, Mill Creek, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
lets see............ be yourself

its really good

on Apr. 26 2010 at 2:53 pm
kissingdarkness SILVER, Mill Creek, Oklahoma
7 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
lets see............ be yourself

its really   u should check out my work

on Apr. 22 2010 at 5:43 pm
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

Although it's really short, I love the way you wrote this poem. You make every word a prize, where the reader wonders what the subtext really means. When I first read the title for this poem, I thought it would be a vampire's thirst, but I'm really not sure! Thanks for sharing and making me think. Check out some of my work, too if you'd like. Keep writing!


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