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The funny part

February 25, 2010
By Squishy-Squish SILVER, Port Richey, Florida
Squishy-Squish SILVER, Port Richey, Florida
8 articles 2 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You can hurt me with the truth, but don't comfort me with your lies."


I'm a rock, a hard unbreakable thing.
The one you can insult and she won't even feel a thing.
The one who fights instead of loves.
The one no one can beat.

That was, untill I met you,
you swore the world to me, we would be together
now and forever.
You said I was the best,
that you wouldn't trade me for any of the rest.

But like any guy, you left.
You taught me a lesson I shall never forget.
To never trust again.
To never fall again.

Now I roam, the streets alone.
Waiting for you to come home.
I should have listen to my consicous.
And never to my heart.
But I guess I've learn my lesson, fairly clear.
To be a rock than a doll you can through around.



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olican16 said...
on Aug. 3 2010 at 3:47 pm
thanks... check out my stuff?

on Jul. 23 2010 at 1:11 pm
Squishy-Squish SILVER, Port Richey, Florida
8 articles 2 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You can hurt me with the truth, but don't comfort me with your lies."

→Thanks for commenting and for the feed back :)

on Jul. 23 2010 at 1:10 pm
Squishy-Squish SILVER, Port Richey, Florida
8 articles 2 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You can hurt me with the truth, but don't comfort me with your lies."

→Thank you very much :)

on Jul. 21 2010 at 2:45 pm
poeticspirit12334 PLATINUM, Groesbeck, Texas
23 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
Wearing a Christian T-shirt, and a cross necklace does NOT make you a Christian. , "For I know the plans I have for you," declares the Lord "They are plans to give you a hope and a future.'' Jeremiah 29:11

this is sooooo good!!!! love all of your stuff!!

on Jul. 20 2010 at 9:17 am
Sill_Sitter11 BRONZE, Milan, Ohio
3 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. We ask ourselves, Who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? We were born to make manifest the glory of God that is within us. And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same.

I liked it but the flow was kind of off because there were different amounts of lines in each Stanza which kind of... made it off.

on Mar. 10 2010 at 6:10 pm
Squishy-Squish SILVER, Port Richey, Florida
8 articles 2 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You can hurt me with the truth, but don't comfort me with your lies."

Thanks Sarah. Just thought of it and wrote it. Happy to know you like it :)

Sarbear GOLD said...
on Mar. 10 2010 at 3:06 pm
Sarbear GOLD, Milan, Ohio
10 articles 4 photos 489 comments

Favorite Quote:
--Before you criticize someone, you should walk a mile in their shoes. That way, when you criticize them, you're a mile away from them and you have their shoes.
--When life gives you lemons, squirt them in people's eyes.

Wow, I liked this! It flowed really well and it was different from all the typical love poems. Good job