a younger version of her

March 3, 2010
she was beyond violent
she was transcendently obsessed with Evil
she was mentally disturbed
she executed the Devil and beyond
she caused destruction
she brought Hell upon our kingdom
she unleashed darkness upon our innocent souls
i have been observing Her upon my birth
as every second of my life passed by
it felt as if i was becoming
a younger version of Her
i forbade myself to look in the mirror
for i grew beastier by the second
i grew fearless
i grew heartless
i grew inhuman
i did not like it nor embraced it
years passed as i isolated myself from life and all
but i was still observing Her
and she was as beyond Evil as ever
one day i decided to look in the mirror
and see who i have become over those years
when i looked in the mirror i saw Her
she smirked at me with beautiful Evil eyes
just then i hurled a black skull at the mirror
causing it to shatter
as i saw Her falling apart her Evil smirk fading
she was all covered in blood
Her soul was parting Her
as she was trying to catch the helpless hand of life
but it was too late
for a wind blew Her Spirit and soul
freeing us as the dawn of a new day
could be glimpsed now
Her reign was over
and i am no longer Her slave nor
a younger version of Her
i am Her...





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condor said...
May 13, 2010 at 11:01 pm
i keep commenting but nothing happens lol...thx guys
 
MidnightAngel7 replied...
Aug. 28, 2010 at 9:57 pm
I'm a Christian too, but some of my poems (not on Teenink) are phscyo. I totally love your work! Its amazing! You really picture it while your reading it.
 
condor replied...
Sept. 4, 2010 at 1:48 pm
omg thanks so much midnightangel ;]
 
BoosflashThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 11, 2010 at 4:59 pm
this is really a great peice and ending-I love the ending. youre gonna be great one day-I can feel it....theres something in the air.....(5 stars)......
 
condor replied...
May 13, 2010 at 9:20 pm
omg thank you so very much...i had to make some changes to it though because the original version was too insane lol im christian [ex-member of the choir] and so i dont way go over the limit..every time i cross the line i take a step back thats why all my poems have two versions lol....omg am i boring u
 
condor replied...
May 13, 2010 at 10:26 pm
omg thx but i had to make some changes cuz the original was too insane andim  christian [x-member of choir] so i dont wanna cross the line thats why all of my poems have two versions lol
 
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