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The sun without the shine.
The stars without the moon.
The wind without the air.
The song without the birds.
The spark without the fire.
Me without you.




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hrsegrl said...
Mar. 17, 2010 at 7:50 pm:
well, excuse me, but i wrote that by MYSELF... if you have a hard time believing that, 2 bad...
 
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queentabbiecat99 said...
Mar. 15, 2010 at 8:45 pm:
i think its very good you don't need a lot of words. it's just how people feel when they lost a love one they don't use a lot of words ether they are in to much pain
 
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Sarbear This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 14, 2010 at 10:16 am:
I feel like this needs more. Maybe go in deeper and talk about how you feel without your loved one. Use similes and work into how you feel. I do like simple poems too, but I feel like you left me short. Good job though, and keep writing!!
Make sure you check out my poems too! :-)
 
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taylor_rae said...
Mar. 13, 2010 at 5:34 pm:
its a good poem but i doesnt have much emotions in it when i read a poem i like to feel what the author is feeling
 
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starlight26:) said...
Mar. 13, 2010 at 10:40 am:
I thin you had a great and meaningfl poem going but I was surprised to see it so short. In my opinon you should have made It a bit longer. Other than that it was wonderful. I can truly relate to it!! :) ~
 
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ird13 said...
Mar. 10, 2010 at 9:06 am:
This sounds like the song Without You from the musical Rent. I really like it and it's very true. You should add more stanzas though, but it does convey the emotion well. ^.^
 
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Chelz said...
Mar. 9, 2010 at 12:59 pm:
I was okay because it sounded to much like you got it off the internet. You could have put more power in it. But keep it up
 
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chrissmd said...
Mar. 8, 2010 at 9:44 pm:
this is impressive. it perfectly describes the feeling so many people struggle to explain in so few words. great job.
 
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hxcRocker said...
Mar. 8, 2010 at 12:35 am:
These are my favorite types of poems short but full of emotion. I like it
 
hrsegrl replied...
Mar. 8, 2010 at 1:19 pm :
Thanx!
xoxo: hrsegrl
 
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gennygirl said...
Mar. 7, 2010 at 11:18 pm:
i like this, sweet and to the point
 
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