Can You See It?

February 22, 2010
By nellie94525 GOLD, Azusa, California
nellie94525 GOLD, Azusa, California
11 articles 2 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
A dying man needs to die, as a sleepy man needs to sleep, and there comes a time when it is wrong, as well as useless, to resist.


Can you see it, Mommy?
There!
No, you're looking the wrong way.
Yes!

Oh, it's beautiful.
Remember we used to go there.
And sit on the boulder
with our feet in the river.

Can we go there again Mommy?
You can still see it, right?
I love it there.

Remember our picnics?
And you dropped your apple?
And i remember trying to get it,
but you got sad because i fell.

Why do you cry a lot now?
I dont remember getting out of the water,
just you crying.

Couldn't you see your apple swimming away?
I needed to get it
for you.
Just for you.

Mommy,
why are you crying right now?
Let's have another picnic!
Mommy?

Why'd you walk away?
Mommy, please stop crying,
and we can have a picnic.
Please, Mommy.
Please.


And so I sat on the boulder,
alone,
with my feet in the water,
watching an apple swim downstream.



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on May. 20 2010 at 6:10 pm
VampiericRain GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
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Would you like a side of epic with that fail?

Wow. Thats amazing that you can just sit down and write. I cant do that at all. :)

on May. 18 2010 at 10:12 pm
nellie94525 GOLD, Azusa, California
11 articles 2 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
A dying man needs to die, as a sleepy man needs to sleep, and there comes a time when it is wrong, as well as useless, to resist.

thanks..

i just got bored one night and this happened...


on May. 12 2010 at 3:56 pm
VampiericRain GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
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Would you like a side of epic with that fail?

Im speechless. That is so deep that I...I dont know. This is amazing beyond all reason. I love it. So sad and so deep. Five stars! :) I would really love it if a writer of your caliber would read some of my writings.

Im curious though. Did this actually happen to you or did you just write it?


on May. 12 2010 at 9:58 am
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

im breathless right now. that left me SOO much to think about. gosh, that was amazingly deep. it's awesome :) i really don't know what else to say, im just in AWE. wow, 5 stars :) would you mind commenting on some of my work work please?


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