Can You See It?

February 22, 2010
Can you see it, Mommy?
No, you're looking the wrong way.

Oh, it's beautiful.
Remember we used to go there.
And sit on the boulder
with our feet in the river.

Can we go there again Mommy?
You can still see it, right?
I love it there.

Remember our picnics?
And you dropped your apple?
And i remember trying to get it,
but you got sad because i fell.

Why do you cry a lot now?
I dont remember getting out of the water,
just you crying.

Couldn't you see your apple swimming away?
I needed to get it
for you.
Just for you.

why are you crying right now?
Let's have another picnic!

Why'd you walk away?
Mommy, please stop crying,
and we can have a picnic.
Please, Mommy.

And so I sat on the boulder,
with my feet in the water,
watching an apple swim downstream.

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***Rain*** said...
May 12, 2010 at 3:56 pm

Im speechless. That is so deep that I...I dont know. This is amazing beyond all reason. I love it. So sad and so deep. Five stars! :) I would really love it if a writer of your caliber would read some of my writings.

Im curious though. Did this actually happen to you or did you just write it?

nellie94525 replied...
May 18, 2010 at 10:12 pm


i just got bored one night and this happened...

VampiericRain replied...
May 20, 2010 at 6:10 pm
Wow. Thats amazing that you can just sit down and write. I cant do that at all. :)
dreamer_believer said...
May 12, 2010 at 9:58 am
im breathless right now. that left me SOO much to think about. gosh, that was amazingly deep. it's awesome :) i really don't know what else to say, im just in AWE. wow, 5 stars :) would you mind commenting on some of my work work please?
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