Backseats

February 4, 2010
By AbbotRabbit GOLD, Abolana, District Of Columbia
AbbotRabbit GOLD, Abolana, District Of Columbia
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Favorite Quote:
This poem has great flow and insight.
I really enjoyed it.
Lovely poem darling =]
-Please check out the works that I have posted on here it would be highly appreciated and I think you would greatly enjoy them, Thankk youz-
XxIll tell you Im an orphan after you meet myy familyXx


Our whole relationship has revolved around backseats.
We met in a backseat:
We were going to see a new movie with friends
fitting seven
where only three
were supposed to go
you didn't care
people were staring
you kissed my cheek and tousled my hair.
One year later I fell asleep in hospital chair:
My aunt was in a car accident
I couldn't leave her
you carried me and laid
me in the backseat silently
whispering I love you.
One year and three months after:
We had awkward laughs as we trusted each other
and gave up everything in a backseat.
We have been together for four years:
Now I have taken a backseat, a backseat to her, the girl you say is just a friend.
We now sit in a backseat:
I remember the last four years
I look at you
and say its
over.
Our last moment in a backseat.



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on Mar. 7 2013 at 4:37 am
JessesAngel SILVER, Lincoln, Delaware
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Favorite Quote:
When angry, count to four; when very angry, swear. And never tell your problems to anyone. 20% don't care and the other 80% are glad you have them

wow this is powerful :)

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on Sep. 22 2011 at 4:26 pm
M.S.S. GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
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"WACKADOO!!!" "You made a funny!" "Red Seven! Red Seven!! Red Seh-ven-a!!!" "Swaaaaag!!!!" "Ratchet" "God Said No" "God Said Yes"

Ohmegosh!!! I really loved this peom you pulled me in from the start,,keep it up,,,thanks for taking a look at my work. i plan to read all your works can't wait to see what you have in store,,,maybe it'll help get my mojo back...i haven't posted in four months:((

on Jul. 29 2010 at 2:28 pm
MelanieLouise PLATINUM, Plymouth, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
to live a creative life, we must lose our fear of being wrong

really great and inspiring :) you have talent. keep writing, Mel...oh and if you have time i would like it if you checked out my work :)

R.S.RICKS GOLD said...
on Apr. 23 2010 at 8:04 am
R.S.RICKS GOLD, Rokdale, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
death and life the same but in diffrent forms so why try to change something you have no control over.

this is... WOW! i love the insite that you put into the word of love and hatred is so powerful. the ovce is there in the words that are seen the words of hate are implied to show us all the truth on true love. think you for this and keep on going.

 

-R.I.RICKS


on Apr. 6 2010 at 5:02 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

This is really good and rather sad as it nears the end.

Keep writing.


Milo! said...
on Mar. 9 2010 at 3:09 pm
Oh my gosh. It's tragically beautiful.

yblehs GOLD said...
on Mar. 4 2010 at 7:28 pm
yblehs GOLD, BelAire, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
"there's nothing to fear, but fear itself"

okay, i honestly love your poems!

you are such a good writer,

and now i know people actually like my work. thanks to you(:

keep writing, hun

you're amazing at it

on Mar. 3 2010 at 8:23 pm
PoetLaureate07 PLATINUM, Aberdeen, Mississippi
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to risk not being loved in return. To hope is to risk pain. To try is to risk failure, but the greatest hazard in life is to risk nothing..

This is amazing!!! Keep writing, PLEASE!!! This is beautiful..... I kinda had an idea what it would be about, but I didn't expect them to break up in a backseat... =)

on Mar. 3 2010 at 8:11 pm
that was very good! keep writing. i enjoy reading your work :)

on Feb. 26 2010 at 5:16 pm
Daniel_Scott SILVER, Chandler, Arizona
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Really interesting idea and really well written too. Loved it.


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