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Here Comes the Rain

Here comes the rain.
The day was indescribable
My mind is a blur.
But I do know the rain is coming

My body wants to break free
And never look back
When will the rain come?

My muscles are tense
What can bring my mind back to reality?
Here comes the rain.

My head points upward as the breeze moves around my skin,
Here comes the rain.

The smell of wet enters the air
The raindrop calmly drops on the bridge of my nose,
My Friend is here,
Welcome back rain.





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sleeplessdreamer said...
Jun. 27, 2010 at 10:34 am
I think I would have like this better if it had a flow. It wasn't very lyrical. (not that all poems have to be) But it wasn't easy to read.  
 
ForeverknownasCheyenne replied...
Aug. 1, 2010 at 7:45 pm
Thank you for being honest!! I always get complimenting comments, and i always just wish someone would give me real feedback..i mean, we are all on here...might as well help each other out right? Anyways, i would love if you would look at more of my work. Thank you!
 
sleeplessdreamer replied...
Aug. 1, 2010 at 8:37 pm
I know exactly what you mean. I always appreciate the constructive criticism more than the praise. It means someone put thought into it. Glad you appreciate it too. And sure, I'd be glad to look at more of your work.
 
MyChey5 said...
Feb. 26, 2010 at 6:36 pm
Didnt mean to put the whole poem as my comments..oh well..
 
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