Dear Space Station

February 18, 2010
Dear Space station,

I'm lost in the stars

I lost my hope lightyears ago

The roads don't exist

Not on Orian's Belt

Out in this world nothing exist

Dear Space Station,

I've ran out of completion

I thought I found something out here

But it turned out to be loneliness

Can you find me soon

Desperate, I'll cry if you don't appear

Because the galaxies darkening

The moon won't show herself

Dear Space Station,

I do understand now

I might not be worthy of your rescue

I think I belong in this stream of comets

I understand now that you won't show

My flare has finally died out

And all hope is lost on Saturn's rings

But if you decide to come...

Take me to your space station

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AsIAm This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 13, 2010 at 4:49 pm

The good:  This was unique, fun, and made me think.  Good job!

The bad: There were a couple of places where you could have improved your grammar and word choice, but it wasn't anything major! :)  Good job!

The random:  Take me to your space station = awesome line

gymbabe This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 28, 2010 at 11:05 am
I agree, this was extremely creative and unique, I love the format, and the ending is excellent.
x0x0Luckyx0x0 replied...
Sept. 13, 2010 at 10:52 am

This is amazing(:

Really great job. It's unique and has a very clear message.

A_Dreamer said...
Mar. 7, 2010 at 5:01 pm
Good job, VERY creative.
I can definitely say I haven't seen anything else like this poem on here. :)
little-miss-sunshine said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 6:35 pm
This is a very good poem with an almost hidden message (meaning it makes you think.) It also could be interpreted in different ways, which is cool. The wording could be improved a bit in some places but still a very creative poem!
chocolateharp said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 4:54 pm
This is one of my favorite poems I've read on here!! It's very imaginative and whimsical, and it makes me think. Great job!!
(do you think you could check out/comment on some of mine? :))
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