Goodbye

February 16, 2010
My eyes burn.
I've cried all day.
You tore my heart
into jagged pieces.
I can't help
but ask why.
You told me
I was too young.
It makes no sense.
I love you.
I guess I should have
told you how i felt.
I wish
I could just melt.
I cry at school
because of these things
I live with every day.
I love you,
You're my BABY!!
Saturday
was a month.
I tried
my hardest
to not all
for a guy,
but I
was unsuccessful!
My heart
fell head over heels for you.
I just wish
to be in your arms.
One more time,
I want to be held
by the one I love.
There isn't a day
that I let pass.
You're my everything!
I'm about to die.
I love you soo much!
You're my love,
and my life.
Since you're out of my life,
I reckon I'm going now....
I LOVE YOU,
& GOODBYE!!!!





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MyFairyTaleEnding said...
Mar. 10, 2010 at 8:45 pm
I can totally relate to this! This was really good except you broke off your lines at times it didn't make sense. Such as when you said, "to not all" or "into jagged pieces". When people start a new line in a poem, this is usally when a comma is put at the end of the line. Other than that it was AMAZING!!! By the way, thanks for taking out the time to read my work! :)
 
PoetLaureate07 replied...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 3:05 pm
I have been told that poetry is the one true peice of written work that the writer doesn't have to completely follow grammar rules... that's exactly what I wanted to do.... ;)
 
PoetLaureate07 said...
Mar. 10, 2010 at 10:09 am
The line is supposed to be "I tried...my hardest...to not fall....."
sorry about the confusion... =)
 
Pensive?Gurl said...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 5:15 pm
this poem is really nice. i like it a lot! and thanks, by the way, for commenting on my story "Masqurade"!
 
PoetLaureate07 replied...
Mar. 5, 2010 at 8:45 am
You're welcome... I really enjoyed it!!! btw.... constructive criticism is ALWAYS welcome
 
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