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She sits
Sits on her bathroom floor
The cold aluminum
She hopes,
Might help numb the pain,
But it dosn't,
Dosn't go away
She's left crying,
And at the same time,

Dreams of the perfect life,

That could be.





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choirofangels said...
Feb. 27, 2010 at 6:46 pm
ahhh thats the one i helped with!!! haha :) btw stalonee its tori if you havent noticed by my erm...amazingnesss :)
 
Sferron replied...
Mar. 2, 2010 at 7:17 pm
Hah. You're silly. =P
 
pyropoet replied...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 6:51 pm
this...this is full of emotion (at least to me). im not sure if this is something you've felt personally, but it is something that i've felt. i guess that's why we have the ability to write - to let out the pain, the sadness, all of our emotions. i really like the flow of this one - it really connects to the reader, if that makes sense.
 
Sferron replied...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 6:56 pm
It makes perfect sense. And I have the ability to take what's around me and put it in words. A lot of my work that i havn't put up yet is based on my surroundings. and thank you (: And im sorry for what your feeling ):
 
pyropoet replied...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 7:00 pm
hey! dont be sorry! its what drives my poems, my writing.
ive never been good at writing about my surroundings (im mostly emotional), but i would love to see some of your work if you choose to post it!
 
Sferron replied...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 7:35 pm
alright! haha i will
 
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