I love the rain

February 12, 2010
By NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
8 articles 7 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
I declare to you that woman must not depend upon the protection of man, but must be taught to protect herself, and there I take my stand.
- Susan B. Anthony


I love the rain it's like music,
I love the rain because no one can see me cry for the tings I've done.
I love the rain because it's beutiful.
I love the rain because is's cool on my warm skin,
I love the rain because it washes away all my fears,
I love the rain because it's like the skys crying a thousand tears,
I love the rain because no one can see me for what I've done,
I love the rain and te way it cresses my skin,
I love the way it washes the hurt away, I love the sound the smell the feel,
I love the rain because I know the sun will shine again one day.


The author's comments:
The rain inspired it i was in history and my teacher was going on and on and I started this.

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on Apr. 27 2010 at 4:49 pm
--LoveHappens--, Fairfield, Connecticut
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"A friend is someone who knows you, but loves you anyway"

I truly enjoyed this it really captures everything about the rain. Great job and keep writing!!! If you could please look at my work called The Pretty One and rate and comment. Thanks

on Feb. 27 2010 at 4:13 pm
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
8 articles 7 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
I declare to you that woman must not depend upon the protection of man, but must be taught to protect herself, and there I take my stand.
- Susan B. Anthony

Thanks i love the rain to lol

*Belle* said...
on Feb. 27 2010 at 3:13 pm
this is excellent! i just love the way the poem flows together. and i love the rain too. :)

on Feb. 24 2010 at 8:05 pm
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
8 articles 7 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
I declare to you that woman must not depend upon the protection of man, but must be taught to protect herself, and there I take my stand.
- Susan B. Anthony

um repetition was the point of the work ...thats why its up repeating

on Feb. 24 2010 at 7:51 pm
Nikiblue PLATINUM, Bloomfield Hills, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Stupid Is As Stupid Does." -Forest Gump (;
"No one who achieves success does so without the help of others. The wise and confident acknowledge this help with gratitude."

The imagery was pretty good, but I think the repetition of "I love the rain" so many times is unnecessary. Yes if you repeated it three times maybe four it'd be ok, but you repeated it a little too many times. Also, the lines are a little long. If you spread the sentences in only a few phrases each stanza, it would have flowed a little better in my opinion. Sorry to be harsh.

on Feb. 23 2010 at 7:49 pm
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
8 articles 7 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
I declare to you that woman must not depend upon the protection of man, but must be taught to protect herself, and there I take my stand.
- Susan B. Anthony

Thanks to all of you!

on Feb. 23 2010 at 7:47 pm
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
8 articles 7 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
I declare to you that woman must not depend upon the protection of man, but must be taught to protect herself, and there I take my stand.
- Susan B. Anthony

Thank you..yeah im using googl docs and it auto corrects things i dont want it to

on Feb. 23 2010 at 7:46 pm
KanenRenoir SILVER, Caldwell, Texas
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Wow, this was really good,. There were a few typo, but I really enjoyed it, especially the last line.

on Feb. 23 2010 at 7:43 pm
chocolateharp SILVER, Plaistow, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
"Dear God," she prayed, "let me be something every minute of every hour of my life. Let me be gay; let me be sad. Let me be cold; let me be warm. Let me be hungry...have too much to eat. Let me be ragged or well dressed. Let me be sincere - be deceitful. Let me be truthful; let me be a liar. Let me be honorable and let me sin. Only let me be something every blessed minute. And when I sleep, let me dream all the time so that not one little piece of living is ever lost." - Betty Smith (A Tree Grows in Brooklyn)

This is beautiful, and it feels very heartfelt. Great work; keep writing!!

on Feb. 21 2010 at 2:50 pm
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
8 articles 7 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
I declare to you that woman must not depend upon the protection of man, but must be taught to protect herself, and there I take my stand.
- Susan B. Anthony

I am thanking you out loud even if u can't hear me lol

on Feb. 21 2010 at 2:49 pm
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
8 articles 7 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
I declare to you that woman must not depend upon the protection of man, but must be taught to protect herself, and there I take my stand.
- Susan B. Anthony

Thank you very much

on Feb. 21 2010 at 2:36 pm
SarClark BRONZE, NC, Connecticut
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Yeah, I agree (Amber) This was really good!

on Feb. 21 2010 at 2:36 pm
love2love17 GOLD, Springfield, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
You only live once, but if you do it right, once is enough. -Mae West

This is very beautiful- I love the comparisons!

on Feb. 21 2010 at 1:20 pm
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
8 articles 7 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
I declare to you that woman must not depend upon the protection of man, but must be taught to protect herself, and there I take my stand.
- Susan B. Anthony

Thank you very much

on Feb. 20 2010 at 5:15 pm
AmberAnn_d-_-b SILVER, Laconia, New Hampshire
9 articles 12 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't sweat the small stuff, and its all small stuff."~CFC

I like the format, good job :)


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