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I love the rain

I love the rain it's like music,
I love the rain because no one can see me cry for the tings I've done.
I love the rain because it's beutiful.
I love the rain because is's cool on my warm skin,
I love the rain because it washes away all my fears,
I love the rain because it's like the skys crying a thousand tears,
I love the rain because no one can see me for what I've done,
I love the rain and te way it cresses my skin,
I love the way it washes the hurt away, I love the sound the smell the feel,
I love the rain because I know the sun will shine again one day.





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--LoveHappens-- said...
Apr. 27, 2010 at 4:49 pm
I truly enjoyed this it really captures everything about the rain. Great job and keep writing!!! If you could please look at my work called The Pretty One and rate and comment. Thanks
 
*Belle* said...
Feb. 27, 2010 at 3:13 pm
this is excellent! i just love the way the poem flows together. and i love the rain too. :)
 
Volleyballer33 replied...
Feb. 27, 2010 at 4:13 pm
Thanks i love the rain to lol
 
Nikiblue said...
Feb. 24, 2010 at 7:51 pm
The imagery was pretty good, but I think the repetition of "I love the rain" so many times is unnecessary. Yes if you repeated it three times maybe four it'd be ok, but you repeated it a little too many times. Also, the lines are a little long. If you spread the sentences in only a few phrases each stanza, it would have flowed a little better in my opinion. Sorry to be harsh.
 
Volleyballer33 replied...
Feb. 24, 2010 at 8:05 pm
um repetition was the point of the work ...thats why its up repeating
 
KanenRenoir said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 7:46 pm
Wow, this was really good,. There were a few typo, but I really enjoyed it, especially the last line.
 
Volleyballer33 replied...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 7:47 pm
Thank you..yeah im using googl docs and it auto corrects things i dont want it to
 
Laughternchoclate said...
Feb. 21, 2010 at 2:36 pm
Yeah, I agree (Amber) This was really good!
 
Volleyballer33 replied...
Feb. 21, 2010 at 2:50 pm
I am thanking you out loud even if u can't hear me lol
 
love2love17 said...
Feb. 21, 2010 at 2:36 pm
This is very beautiful- I love the comparisons!
 
Volleyballer33 replied...
Feb. 21, 2010 at 2:49 pm
Thank you very much
 
AmberAnn_d-_-b said...
Feb. 20, 2010 at 5:15 pm
I like the format, good job :)
 
Volleyballer33 replied...
Feb. 21, 2010 at 1:20 pm
Thank you very much
 
chocolateharp replied...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 7:43 pm
This is beautiful, and it feels very heartfelt. Great work; keep writing!!
 
Volleyballer33 replied...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 7:49 pm
Thanks to all of you!
 
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