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Sitting
Home.
*KNOCK*

You arrived.

I
Hide. Away
Anyways
There is no place to be safe.

Screams
Nothing new by now.
Steps
I know what follows. Somehow.

Fought
One more afternoon. One
more tear. Dropped.
Don't surrender I say, but I know we won't last much more.

Scratch.
But this time it's not alone;
This time something comes. (Drunk)

Within you

holding something.
You call, Lou.
I won't answer.

Steps.
I know this time we won't survive.
We won't make it.
But at least I thank God for live.

Good you, take no compasion.
Good

me. Play hide and seek.

Shower! That's.
I pretend to bath. You
sleep. I survive.

Go to school.
On my bike.
Everything's cool.
Now's alright.

But today is different.
I got tired.
Instead of home went to police.
It's not only anymore desired.

New family.

*KNOCK*

But this time I'm safe
I don't need to pay



Anymore
For how you behave.





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tibby said...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 1:48 pm
that is amaizing. i can relate to what your saying...
 
LuzA. replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 1:58 pm
Thank You so much!! :)
 
LuzA. replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 2:15 pm
Please check FakE You and comment!!
It happened to me... I am still kinda recovering from it! :(
 
xLpoet said...
Feb. 20, 2010 at 1:41 pm
I like the unique structure. The courage to write something bold is needed in the world. Keep writing. I write about things like this in an abstract way. I like it how you did it outright.
 
LuzA. replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 1:59 pm
Oh!! You're so nice! Thank You!!!! :D I wrote this because I thought that some children need this help. They should NEVER give up.!
 
LuzA. replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 2:14 pm
Please check FakE You and comment!! Please :)
 
BrookeSchueneman said...
Feb. 20, 2010 at 12:57 pm
The ending was great, and it, overall, was great aswell. Bravo :) read some of my work if you get the chance, please :) rate, if you can!
 
LuzA. replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 2:00 pm
Of Course! I'll check them out! :) Thank you so much for taking the time to comment! :) You can't imagine how happy I am and how lovely it is to read possitive comments like yours, specially!!! :D
 
LuzA. replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 2:14 pm
Can you please check Fake You and comment???
Thankkss!! :D
 
MessOfADreamer said...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 7:15 pm
I love the way this is written, it is very powerful and strong. It's disjointed, but it flows anyway, and it made me think. Good job. :D
 
LuzA. replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 2:01 pm
Oh! Thank you!! :D And thank you for the help, like this I can really reflect and, you know, do next ones better!! Greatt!! Thank you so muchh!! :)
 
LuzA. replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 2:13 pm
Please check Fake You and comment!! :)
 
wow this is deep. i was abused for a while but then i moved with my dad and he hit for punishment and he has abuse on his police file but i never thought of it like this. this is amazing! pleas check out my poems
 
LuzA. replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 2:04 pm
NEVER give up my dear!!! :D I wrote this for people like you, so you know there is always the bright side! And superiors (police) are here to help you! :) You have all of me on your side! Take this as advice! :) If you don't do anything, it could get worse and worse until something important can REALLY happen! Thank you for your comment! And I am greattha you -that are experienced- think just as positive of my work!! :D
 
LuzA. replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 2:13 pm
Please check Fake You and commentt! :)
 
***3Lli3*** said...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 2:53 pm
wow this is really good.! I have a lot of poems that are like this please check them out and tell me how u like them.! :)
 
LuzA. replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 2:04 pm
I'll check them out! Of course!! :D Thank you for answering and thank you SO MUCH for appreciating my work!! :D
 
LuzA. replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 2:12 pm
Please check Fake You and commentt!! :)
 
penandink105 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 11:32 am
beautiful but extremely sad! love the way it's written, and its powerful.
 
LuzA. replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 2:07 pm
:O THANK YOU!!!! :D You are so lovely to write the comment OMG and that was just my first free verse!! :D
 
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