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All the same.

I blink my eyes slowly as I turn my head.
The wet grass chills on my legs.
Cooling them from the hot summer sun.
I lean back on the old willow tree.
I glance up, spotting a small fawn eating grass peacefully.
Not even minding me.
I slowly and quitly grabbed my camera, which was hanging around my neck by a strap.
I flash a picture. The fawn glances up, sees me, and returns eating glass.
At that moment I relized that he didnt mind me, even though im a human and he is a small fawn.
We were different in everyway and he didn't mind me one bit.
I guess the lesson I learned that day under the willow tree was that no matter where your from or who you are we are all the same.



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CABhahahahaHPhahahaTLhaha said...
Feb. 18, 2010 at 7:13 pm
tiny tweaks here and there would help. but over all a very pleasent poem!
 
Grania This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 18, 2010 at 4:23 pm
This poem is nice, but it needs to be edited a little bit. You have a few spelling errors and you switched tenses a few times.
Nice job, though. :D
 
NineMuses This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 17, 2010 at 8:36 pm
I thought this was okay. It is not particularly moving or thought provoking, and you really spelled out everything. (Not to mention some spelling errors:"quitly grabbed my camera") However, your imagery is great, the voice of the narrator is simple and clear, and the topic scene could really be expanded on. I think this definitely needs some editing, refining, proofreading, and maybe some expansion, but it has potential.
 
Kai_Kai15 said...
Feb. 16, 2010 at 6:22 pm
BEAUTIFUL!! the moral was fairly easy to understand, and yet it is not easily DONE....absolutely stupendous!!!
 
JackieSutton This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 16, 2010 at 6:00 pm
This poem is really emotional and passionate. You can really feel your thoughts/emotions. good job. :)
 
bryliz100209 said...
Feb. 16, 2010 at 3:03 pm
i see the image, and i feel the emotion. great poem.
 
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