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The blue ink ran across the lines of paper,
In swift movements, a little smudging here and there,
The man wrote down his name, finalizing it.

A tear escaped his long lashes,
Hitting the white paper, creating a crinkled circle.
He looked at his little girl in despair.
It would be the last time he would see those bouncing curls,
Those emerald eyes, tiny dimples, and worn out slippers.

The little girl frowned at her father,
The sight of him crying always tore at her fluttering heart.
She didn’t know why the big man in the gray suit had papers,
Or why Daddy was crying, but she wanted it all to go away.
She wanted to sit back at home on her swing, and Daddy pushing her.

“Gracie,” the man in the suit spoke, “Come with me.”
“Why?” the little girl replied defiantly.
“Because you’re going to the orphanage.”
The little girl turned to her Daddy, who was now sobbing,
And gave him a panicked look, which he only returned with a pained groan.

“Daddy, where is he going to take me?”
The man took her by her tiny arm,
And began to pull her away,
While her father sobbed, watching her being taken away.
“I love you, Gracie; I will get you back, honey. I promise!”
Those were the last words he spoke to his daughter,
And that was the last she saw of him.

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super_nerd This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 5:34 pm
So sad, so beautiful! The beginning shows your skill; it definitely caught my attention. And it seems to put things in perspective...such a huge life-changing event is initiated from such a simple act. Love it :)
lovespromise<3 said...
Mar. 14, 2010 at 8:27 pm
OMG! This is beautiful. I've read alot of your work and I think it's some of the best on Teen Ink. AWESOME AWESOME! Keep writing!
little-miss-sunshine said...
Feb. 26, 2010 at 3:57 pm
Very sad, yet beautiful, poem. I'm not sure it's too realistic as they would probably let them have goodbyes and stuff but still it got the emotion across well. I found this sounded too much like how you would write a story too but still good job!
MetalChickRock said...
Feb. 24, 2010 at 10:11 pm
i like this poem a little more than your other two that ive read so far...sad with it
Kayla. said...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 5:02 pm
wow. amazing and yet sad. I love your writing, each story different but that same? If that makes any sense?? haha oh well, good job anyway. :)
#1Swimmer said...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 1:23 pm
wow, that was really depressing. where did you get your insperation?
Nikiblue replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 1:57 pm
I didn't really have any inspiration. The image of the story just came to me and I wanted to write it down, and that's what I came up with.
kressbe said...
Feb. 20, 2010 at 9:30 pm
That's a good suggestion. Parallelism is cool.
I think this is a really good poem- sometimes narrative poems drift a bit too far into prose, but this is definitely a poem, and a good one.
sillyaardvarkabc said...
Feb. 20, 2010 at 8:43 am
I love this!
However, I think that it would flow better if you refrained from using “and”. for example, you could say: "Those emerald eyes, tiny dimples, those worn out slippers.” Just a suggestion though! Great job.
Nikiblue replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 1:20 pm
Okay, thanks. I'll try to watch that when I write.
xxTokyoXX replied...
Mar. 12, 2010 at 9:48 pm
I was blown away by this.I saw nothing wrong with it.good Job.Keep It Up.
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