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I am the balance of light and dark,
While I am still that of soot and coal.
The coal deeply crimson in it’s black,
The soot ever present upon my back.
The light inside me shines dim,
Yet bright, though I try to hide it away from sight.
I am darkness,
But I am filling with small light.
Though it may be bright,
I’ll quash it with heinous delight.
I’ll snicker when the flame is finally extinguished,
Though I had wished it would put up a fight.
The coal paints me,
It dyes me black.
The soot as fine as sand,
Could never change me back.
Though I would never have it,
Losing my base for attack.
I do sincerely wish,
That the light has fought back.




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Kittycorn_of_Dolphinia said...
Sept. 25, 2010 at 8:49 pm:
Ok first I have to say I love Yoda! ok now on a more serious note I liked this one a lot better and they should definitely stay separated.
 
SilverLuna replied...
Sept. 27, 2010 at 2:03 pm :
Haha, thanks so much! This was one of my darker moments but I still love it anyways! Always write no matter what!
 
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Rawrzchan said...
May 5, 2010 at 11:36 pm:

I love it, it seems like it has a deeper meaning. And its so wonderful.

It sounds like the inner you the person you wish to be is comming out but like you have accepted the person you acctually are so it cant, but you stil wish it would. Or maybe its something totally different, idk my perspective on what it means.

Check out some of my stuff, i dont have a lot though.

 
SilverLuna replied...
May 10, 2010 at 9:49 am :
Thanks! And the way I think of it, when it comes to my writing, though I might try to lead the readers in a certain direction, whatever they take from it is what it is to them. I love your perspective on it and I'll be sure to check out some of your work!(:
 
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MissFaber said...
Mar. 22, 2010 at 11:38 am:
This sounds like it's coming from a seriously confused villain. It's funny and unique ;)
 
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sydelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 12:49 pm:
Wow, this version is even better than the first... It has more rhythm, and a "beat" to it. Two thumbs way, wayyyy up! =D
 
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